Very nice. Though I am curious towards the motives of the mother and daughter as to why they decided to rid themselves of dad in favour of a sister/daughter.
I've always liked the idea of a woman transforming some hapless man into a female-- unbirthing being a sensible means of accomplishing that... but having a plausible reason for "why" is essential.
I mean, it goes against some natural instinct-- would a man want to transform the planet's women into men? Not likely: it only increases the competition. Women would have the same disincentive to transform people of the other sex into their own... but there are a few exceptions.
This story is one of those exceptions: the victim becomes the woman's child. There's no competition between the two; the daughter is easier to raise, and she will continue the mother's genetic line.
This story teases at an element that would have been really interesting: the point at which the former husband discovers that he's now a girl. (Understandably, taking the story that far might have made it too long and strayed too far from vore/unbirth)...
Thanks for the comments, and I'm glad you liked the story. I agree with you, it would have been interesting to go far enough to see him discover what she's made of him - in all honesty, it's more because I didn't think of it than anything else that I didn't follow the story out that far. This was a story that I started writing out as a short scene because I had a snippet of an idea that wouldn't let go, but wouldn't go any farther either, then it snowballed into enough of a story to post.
Posted by Radijs 15 years ago Report
Very nice. Though I am curious towards the motives of the mother and daughter as to why they decided to rid themselves of dad in favour of a sister/daughter.
Posted by Jacquelope 15 years ago Report
Yeah, the mystery of their motivation behind doing that is part of what makes it so interesting.
Posted by dreamweevil 15 years ago Report
Well done, as usual!
I've always liked the idea of a woman transforming some hapless man into a female-- unbirthing being a sensible means of accomplishing that... but having a plausible reason for "why" is essential.
I mean, it goes against some natural instinct-- would a man want to transform the planet's women into men? Not likely: it only increases the competition. Women would have the same disincentive to transform people of the other sex into their own... but there are a few exceptions.
This story is one of those exceptions: the victim becomes the woman's child. There's no competition between the two; the daughter is easier to raise, and she will continue the mother's genetic line.
This story teases at an element that would have been really interesting: the point at which the former husband discovers that he's now a girl. (Understandably, taking the story that far might have made it too long and strayed too far from vore/unbirth)...
Again, good work!
--dw
Posted by Groblek 15 years ago Report
Thanks for the comments, and I'm glad you liked the story. I agree with you, it would have been interesting to go far enough to see him discover what she's made of him - in all honesty, it's more because I didn't think of it than anything else that I didn't follow the story out that far. This was a story that I started writing out as a short scene because I had a snippet of an idea that wouldn't let go, but wouldn't go any farther either, then it snowballed into enough of a story to post.