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Helping a Pregnant Friend By Groblek

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zepher42

Posted by zepher42 9 years ago

Will there be a sequel to this?

Groblek

Posted by Groblek 9 years ago

I'm not planning one, or I'd just have held on to the story until I'd written the whole thing. That said, I do see how it could lend itself to one, so it's a possibility for the future, it depends on what I feel like, I guess.

Radijs

Posted by Radijs 9 years ago

Nice work as always Groblek. I enjoyed it very much.

dreamweevil

Posted by dreamweevil 9 years ago

Very nice! Haven't seen an idea like that one before.

Seemed to skip over how the two women's eggs actually join. While I think we can figure that out, it raises the question (as in any lesbian pregancy) of who ultimately carries the baby: Holly could have easily implanted Sandra with her own egg, leading to Sandra being "born pregnant".

Women synchronize their menstrual cycles just by being near each other long enough (thanks to pheromones). I was surprised that it happened so quickly, though-- expected that Sandra would have remained trapped through several cycles before a successful fertilization.

Very creative story... enjoyed it.

--dw

Groblek

Posted by Groblek 9 years ago

dw - I'm glad you liked the story.

I figured that the actual joining of the two eggs didn't really require explanation, as it's not too far off of reality. I considered a somatic cell fusion with one of Sandra's skin cells and one of Holly's ova - that's been done in the lab, though never brought to term, but having their ova fuse seemed better for the story. I considered having Sandra carry the baby, but ended up deciding the other way, and the quick synchronization of their cycles was pure artistic license - since I was taking major liberties with biological plausablity by making it same-size, I figured what's one more small one for the sake of how I want to have the story go. Of course, now if I consider a sequel, I don't think I'll be able to avoid having to try and explain some of it in more detail. :)

dreamweevil

Posted by dreamweevil 9 years ago

Groblek,

Actually, the way you did it might have been better. I've a tendency towards over-explanation, and what I've discovered is that if you leave things up to the reader, they'll fill in the gaps without even knowing they're doing it.

A sequel to this one might be tough. You made the process (by which Holly gains the ability to unbirth another woman) intentionally difficult and unpleasant, and Holly looks like she's now set up for a "normal" pregnancy (though I'd surmise that her offspring is necessarily female). You clearly didn't want to significantly change the world with this birth -- if this "first lesbian birth" was simple and easy, the male of the species would be doomed to extinction. So something unexpected would have to happen.

BTW: If you haven't already, check out Nicola Griffith's "Ammonite": a female researcher is sent to find out why civilization isn't dying out on a planet whose environment is poisonous to men.

-- dw


Throat_Wolf

Posted by Throat_Wolf 9 years ago

Nicely done unbirthing story. Certainly one of the more creative ones I've read.

Paraffine

Posted by Paraffine 9 years ago

This setting was new, refreshing. Nicely (is that even a word?) written, made me want to read it for the story, not for the kink.

vore2412

Posted by vore2412 7 years ago

You know Groblek, this almost makes me think of parthenogenesis (female bearing offspring by mitosis instead of meiosis, just in case you were not sure what that is) with a twist.