Survi-Vore Chp. 3 Uncensored
By magetorment -- Report
Welcome to Survi-Vore, a secret underground game show in which contestants compete to win a massive cash prize. Each week players are forced to play dangerous games in hopes of winning immunity, and each episode one player is voted off. Those unlucky enough to be cast out are eaten by another player chosen by you, the audience.
In Chapter 3 the players are put to the test as their challenge places them in harms way. As the contestants start dying one by one people start to wonder, is this really happening? Wait, wasn't this supposed to be a comedy?
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Posted by Houyo 16 years ago Report
That was a pretty fun read. Honestly, I kind of skipped to the cock vore parts, but the story seems interesting none the less.
Posted by magetorment 16 years ago Report
That's understandable. I honestly did not plan to have cock vore in this series, but both of the participants had a mind for it, and I can't say I'm opposed to the idea.
Also if you like this series there is a thread in the "Works to be shared" forum where you can vote on the next pairing.
Posted by Jocaste 16 years ago Report
Hi. I'm a weirdo: I enjoy -actually reading- my erotica. If I do say so myself, I rather like the effort you put into the most hated guy there. (At least, by all the contestants, he is, I think it's safe to assume.)
Overall Pros:
A mind to keep the audience guessing as to many aspects.
The half endings twice a page in this chapter alone made the story an incredibly absorbing read: Couldn't put it down for the life of me (which is saying a lot, considering that whence I near the 24th hour of lack of sleep, I tend to lose most of my focus and attention span in just one of them.)
Your style of writing does not contain an explicit amount of lack of punctuation, capitalization, and things of that nature, and appears to have been thoroughly proof read.
Overall Cons:
Since I found almost nothing wrong with them, the first noticed was the minimal typographical errors. (I'm happy to offer my own services as a former writer and an outstanding editor/storyboard technician, if you don't find this too abrasive.)
I feel as though your scat in the second chapter could have been enough for the casual scat fan, but perhaps not enough to the avid scat readers (Secretly, until now, one of such being myself.)
In the future, whether I am able to work with you or not, (believe me, I'm completely enthusiastic at the prospect) I look forward to further installments, and hope you don't take my critique the wrong way.
Best wishes,
The Wuffeh
Posted by dimensione510 15 years ago Report
That was good. I had to kind of skip over the end, because CV freaks me out, though.
Great series, any chance of continuing it?
Posted by magetorment 15 years ago Report
I'm not going to continue this series specifically. But I am planning on rebooting it. The first story will come out as soon as I've worked up the interest in actually writing it.
Posted by dimensione510 15 years ago Report
Ah, that's good. It's a great concept, and humor isn't often seen in vore.