Posted by oldman40k2003 14 years ago Report

An interesting story with a few twists I didn't see coming.

Posted by unicorn 14 years ago Report

Wow, this is an amazing story. 'Beautiful' is the best word for it. It's got a lot of emotion in it, which is uncommon for vore literature, and fetish work in general (i'd guess) And i think that makes it a lot better. I was moved as well as aroused.

I'm really excited now, because you uploaded other stories too... i'll definitely have to read them!
Thanks for sharing :D

Posted by sansuki 14 years ago Report

Thanks. I usually do try to do more sympathetic predators, because the emotions that aren't simple sadism always interest me more than indifference or callousness.

Posted by WolfFort 14 years ago Report

Very good indeed.

Posted by temporos 14 years ago Report

Well written, mate! Immediate fav. :)

Posted by Imrhys 14 years ago Report

Your sympathetic predator is going to be a hard show to follow with my own pred/prey story plans, but you are quite the inspiration for the personality options for my pred.

Now this take of yours on oozes and subsuming the prey from within and the process itself is... speechless. Not even with as verbose as I have gotten with RP's in this very area have I come close to this work of yours.

*bows humbly and appreciatively*

Posted by French_snack 13 years ago Report

Amazing, through and through. As always, I'm blown away by your imagination, and your skill in putting it into words for a story. The twist was good, and the description of the two becoming one, sharing one body... I've never read anything quite like it.

Posted by Arbon 12 years ago Report

Whenever I read a vore story, especially from places like writing.com or Eka’s portal, I will always read the beginning chapter and the ending chapter before I bother investing any time with the actual story. I have to, for so many of them are so bland. It isn’t simply a matter of being unoriginal, it’s that I rarely have any reason to care about the characters themselves. Be they one-shot, poorly detailed, and serving as a throwaway character to move the plot forward, or a recurring character with such a blatant, unrealistic personalities (usually from the predator) that I can’t sympathize with them. Most of the predator’s I see in literature are cold hearted monsters that you just want to see killed whenever the hero of the tale decides to show up. Which doesn’t generally happen …

But this? Oh wow, this story? I started reading the first paragraph, planning to skim down to the end to see if it was worth anything before moving on … but kept reading. That first paragraph had me hooked, I just couldn’t look away from the screen. The next paragraph worked the same way, then again as I read down through the meeting. I almost skipped over the sex scenes because those weren’t what I was looking for, but even they were so thoughtfully worded, offering such insight on the main character’s history, emotions and thoughts … I read this tale from beginning to end. If you had to ask what my favorite part was? I’d say the length. I did not want this story to end.

I have a reason to care about these characters, to cringe if they get hurt and to be disappointed if nothing ever happens to them again. Heck, I care about those miniscule scratches of a world I’ve only just witnessed that I want to scour your archives and read over everything, just in case one of them happens to be as good as this. And I will point out that part of it is your use of something that I only learned recently.

The lack of information can be more interesting than long, convoluted expositions. You could have detailed “Dave” as a slime … er, sorry, Ooze, at the start of the story and let everyone know what to expect. But by saying nothing you leave the reader guessing, and it sets up for a perfect plot twist. Heck, then you could have just ended with them ‘merging’ and her in control as so many writers do, but noooo, you set it all up for yet another plot twist!

Everything is so vividly detailed, not just the actions or the setting, but the characters feelings and lines of reasoning. Ok, that’s it, I want to know right now if you write stories anywhere else. Sofurry? Writing.com? Publish your own books yet? With the kind of talent I’m seeing here I’d be hard pressed to believe erotica is all you write.

Posted by sansuki 12 years ago Report

Well gosh, thanks!

This is one of the first fetish-focused stories I wrote, and while it shows in places it is also one of the few stories I've written where I can honestly say I doubt I could improve it. Apart from a few grammatical rough edges and typos, that is. I will confess right up front before you wander any further into my gallery that over half of my stories here are 'quickies', one-shot one-scene stories that exist as a vehicle for vore, because- well, they're a lot of fun to write too and even when I do something without a lot of plot and characterization I try to make up for it by keeping a high level of description and detail. Writing smut isn't anything to be ashamed of, as long as it's well-written smut; that's my general philosophy.

A lot of what tends to get my interest on more than a superficial level about vore or other fetishes is power dynamics. Who thinks they're in control of a situation? Who seems to be in control? Who's actually in control? When those are different, as they are for this entire story until the very end, why and what consequences does that have for the characters as they interact? And when you add into that a deep love of demi-humans/anthros and especially slimes, well, this story was self-indulgent on a whole lot of levels for me. :lol:

As for other places: I do write other things other places, but I keep a pretty tight firewall between what I write that's fetishy and what I write that isn't, right down to different folders on my hard drive. Put it this way- I don't and will never approach making a living from writing, but I do from time to time sell stories, hmm? Hopefully that's enough of an answer.

Posted by Thanatos2k 12 years ago Report

This is...the best absorption story I have ever read. Wow.

Posted by temporos 12 years ago Report

Just reread this a year after my first perusal, and it's still as magnificent a work as it was then. Very, very well done, my friend! ^_^ This story will likely reside in my favourites list for a long time to come.