Lejule vs. Rüggo
By Allard-Liao -- Report
My first round entry for PVT 2010. Yes, it's short, but I'm not too used to writing vore.
Also, I hope I didn't butcher Rüggo's characterization.
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Posted by Ka-Atis 16 years ago Report
I haven't read it yet, I decided to wait until I get my own entry finished. But then I will comment and give feedback.
Well, as long as you just butchered the *character*.. :P
Anyhow - Nice to see that I'm not the only one here doing hardvore. I was kind of expecting that from a werewolf though.. ;)
Posted by Ka-Atis 16 years ago Report
I hope he was tasty.. ;)
Overall, you got a good idea of the character, the descriptions fit him, in behavior as well as in ability to inflict heavy damage.
Just one thing - I would say that his vison is *considerably better than a human's*, and not "not much better than a human's". But on the other side, from Lejule's perspective it may appear like that anyways (?)
I think you got the vore pretty well, you got it graphic but without overdoing it. Also, by adding the predator's thoughts you avoided it to be just some mechanical description of the eating (which can easily get repetitive and boring).
I laughed hard at the "corroded prosthetic foot" part.