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Edit: Now with an awesome Illustration by Nalzindar: When UFOs Attack
A lovely day at the beach takes a turn for the worse, when an alien worm, intent on gobbling up the bikini-clad beach-goers, comes to visit.
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Posted by Cruich 13 years ago Report
Still writing "it's" where it should be "its". Should be "UFOs", too. "It's" is "it is" -- always.
It's nice and long, and generally enjoyable, though it feels like everyone just more or less disappears or is forgotten once they're swallowed.
Posted by PrinnyDood 13 years ago Report
Ha, damn, I don't even have a good excuse this time, since I wrote this one pretty recently. Must have been drunk when I edited it or something. One or two can be ignored, but this error was just egregious here. I'm gonna have to edit it. ><
In any case, thank you very much for the helpful criticism, such is not easy to come by. ^_^
Posted by Cruich 13 years ago Report
I'm glad you're taking it in the helpful spirit it was intended. :) I don't usually even bother to critique grammar or spelling in most authors, but your work is otherwise of a high enough quality that I think it matters.
Posted by French_snack 12 years ago Report
Quite heart-warming to see a creature so happy, and so thoroughly enjoying its day! :D
More seriously: A good bit of fun. :)
Posted by PrinnyDood 12 years ago Report
Haha, thanks. One can never truly predict the effect of introducing a species into a new environment. :D
But yeah, this one was pretty much self-indulgent silliness on my part, but thankfully a few people besides me enjoyed it too. xD
Posted by presentfactory 6 years ago Report
Very gud, glad I found this despite it being quite old :>
Posted by PrinnyDood 6 years ago Report
Thank you! I have been doing this for some time, come to think of it. xD