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A group of students go camping to celebrate finally graduating from college! You'd think, though, they'd have enough knowledge (or at least common sense) between them to avoid the strange creature that roams the mountain late at night...
Part of a trade with the rockin' talented Dimensione510! I got totally carried away with writing this, but I hope everyone can find it sufficiently enjoyable.
Oh, um, prolly 'oughta warn that one of the prey is pregnant. That may be off-putting to some.
But really. A while back I said a story I wrote reminded me of a cheesy horror story- well, this blows that out of the water in terms of cheesy horror. Four campers enter, no one leaves. Bwahahahahahahahahahahaha! Enjoy.
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Posted by IGA 12 years ago Report
GTreat story! fluid and entertianing. i love when you write!!
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
Thank you very much!
Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report
Quite the enjoyable story. I liked it.
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
Thank you, it was enjoyable to write as well!
Posted by newenglandee 12 years ago Report
Erk...uh...not that Cleo as a character didn't interest me, and I did like the bonding between the campers, but...well...why add the pregnancy into it? It just seemed to make it even more tasteless and vore already pushes the boundaries of tastelessness, even when it's willing.
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
Well, the majority of it was that it was requested of me to do so.
From a literary point, I used it as a tool to indicate just how tenuous Libby and Chris's relationship was- "Oh crap, got her pregnant, better put a ring on it," was pretty much the only reason they were together at this point. I also got to use it as another 'strike' against Libby. She pretty callously called her own baby a "thing" and said she'd just abort it, given the chance. So it pointed a bit more towards her being a jerk.
I apologize for any ill feelings it may have caused, but ultimately I stand by my decision to include it.
Posted by newenglandee 12 years ago Report
Ahhh, I see. In that case, I suppose I can understand it. Still feels kinda...squicky, though, even if it was an example of showing how callous Libby was.
Posted by dimensione510 12 years ago Report
Blame me for that part. I have a strange compulsion to put it into everything, sorry.
Posted by newenglandee 12 years ago Report
Really? (Looks over at the avatar) I couldn't tell...
Posted by dimensione510 12 years ago Report
That's actually vore, but yeah. It's like my third most used tag.
Posted by ItsJustaGoober 12 years ago Report
Awesome story,my friend...and the fact it's part of a trade,I'm sure the receiving party was very happy.:D
Libby-...I DON'T LIKE HER...but,I'm sure that was the point...XD
Adam-Kinda...the fall guy,huh?
Claire-Favorite character personality...and to accept her fate...*sniffle*
Chris-...He's funny...in his own way.
Cleo-I like the way she's playful and cunning...like most wolves are 'sought out' to be.
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
Glad ya' liked it, mate. Admittedly, I didn't put much work into developing the characters. Heh... Though yes, it was definitely intentional for Libby to be unlikable.
Posted by ItsJustaGoober 12 years ago Report
Well,is that was the point...my hate for her felt oh-so much more satisfying...like Libby felt to Cleo~XD
Posted by Indighost 12 years ago Report
Fun story. I found it erotic. Was interesting to see a vore story in a horror-movie plotline. Only comments:
-These people don't seem like friends, nearly every conversation is an argument.
-Cleo was very cute, well done! I liked the description of what it was like entering her stomach.
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
I agree on that first point- their friendship was really more of an informed attribute... Thank you for the feedback, it's very much appreciated!
Posted by Frosted-mini-girl 12 years ago Report
Wow, just wow. Probably one of my favorite vore stories I've ever read. You, my friend, made a great piece. ^^
Posted by Sy0p 12 years ago Report
Well shucks, thank you kindly. Glad you enjoyed it!
Posted by Bakura 12 years ago Report
Awesome story, but I just read it now, and I was supposed to go camping in a few days...
Posted by twilightwings 12 years ago Report
I liked Claire though D:, huess Cleo liked her more
Posted by LillyBells 11 years ago Report
the story is good, i enjoyed it but i have one comment. the tags say soft vore. there's digestion, that's not soft vore anymore xD
Posted by prounic 9 years ago Report
Honestly, the story is great... But the pregnancy thing... It made me feel sad. And with a vore story it shouldn't be like that