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I've gotten quite a few requests for a story involving pregnant prey so here it is! Rigo unapologetically devours a young expectant mother, one of his employees no less.

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max123

Posted by max123 10 years ago Report

Great story.

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

Thank you!

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newenglandee

Posted by newenglandee 10 years ago Report

If stuff like the "Population Control Act" and Sy0p's Pokemon work is what keeps me lurking around until I finally take my leave, crap like this is why I WANT to leave and never look back. Not only are your protagonists unlikable douchebags with no sense of ethicality or morality in their entire flatly-written body, but your work hides behind a fig leaf of defensibility in terms of what inspires it. When I first looked at your "T-Bone" story I thought perhaps, looking at the summary, it might actually be intelligent and new considering what inspired it. What a shock. Not only is it schlock that's not entertaining and requires immense leaps in logic to understand, it's poorly written. You ought to be ashamed of yourself.

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AlekSavarov

Posted by AlekSavarov 10 years ago Report

I know it's difficult for some people to grasp this concept, but there is a difference between constructive criticism and being an asshole.

You complain that the author's protagonists are unlikeable and cruel, which makes me wonder, have you read ANY other stories on this site? Cruelty isn't exactly a new idea here. You also complain about leaps in logic, which to be frank, is sort of flabbergasting. This is a vore story. A vore story. A VORE story. A human/human full size vore fic. If you're seeking logic, I suspect you are in the wrong place.

But I recognize that those issues are a matter of taste. Some people are turned off by the idea of cruel predators and logical (by vore standards) leaps. That's fine. What's disturbing and baffling to me is the fact that you felt it necessary to reprimand the author for apparently no other reason than because you have different tastes.

And seriously? "Shlock?" "Thought it might actually be intelligent?" Have I mentioned that this is a VORE story? I don't think the author was trying to write fucking Moby Dick here.

If you don't like the author's writing style or stories, fine. Don't read them. But saying that he/she should be ashamed? What a whiny cretin you are. Go fuck off.

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newenglandee

Posted by newenglandee 10 years ago Report

Why should protagonist likability or logical story structure or logical human behavior be sacrificed in ANY kind of story, regardless of the subject matter? Instead of being satisfied with poor standards, why shouldn't demand quality work? The phrase is "don't settle for less". I expect nothing less of other writer's.

And it isn't that I'm utterly against things like dark work or darkfic. Occasionally, they're fine. But when an author continues to write the same things over and over, it reflects badly on them. Let's take Stephen King. We, the public, know he's not really a bad person because his work, whilst dark, usually features good protagonists who tend to have messed up lives. But the phrase is "an artist reveals himself through his work". In his stories, what do you see? Lots of UNBELIEVABLY horrifc bullies, spiritual and supernatural themes, and protagonists with very troubled pasts. One can thereby conclude from these constants in his work that

1. Stephen King has a deep love of fantasy work and it shows in his stories.
2. Stephen King musta been made to eat vomit in his childhood by somebody because he will NOT stop using bully characters that are sick as all fuck.

An artist OCCASIONALLY doing really horrible characters? Fine. But again, when somebody keeps doing this kind of lowbrow, poorly-written, unlikable type of work...

I expect better. ESPECIALLY considering I thought upon reading his "T-Bone" series it had potential. But his character isn't just unlikable, they're UNINTERESTING. They care only about sex and eating people! There's few things worse than flat characters. Compare that to Strega's work, which has a variety or predators, some of whom actually are halfway decent, others whom are malevolent monsters with frightening predatory cunning. Would it really be so hard to write characters that are about more than just what comes out of their dick and what goes into their stomach?

I hold EVERYONE, myself included, to high standards when it comes to writing. And unless I feel a work is really, really freakin' morally offensive, I won't comment on how bad it is. But his stories aren't just morally offensive. They're badly written. There's little detail to the characters or settings, said characters have LITTLE personality beyond sex and food, they're not relatable or likable people, the STORY'S nonexistent! Why would anybody read it when they could get ten times what this story lacks from somebody like Slushy or the like?

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sovet

Posted by sovet 10 years ago Report

I love how when you point to good writing you refer to a mediocre series about pokemon with vague personalities running around eating people instead of something that is actually well written. In regards to the works being morally offensive; that's a matter of taste, but it's not very offensive in the broad spectrum of what is on this site. There's little sadism towards victims, no hard vore, no fixation about the victims suffering/digestion or scat.

Yes, the characters are sort of flat in general, the vore and sex scenes could use more detail, and I dislike sex in vore. but I don't know why this particular one sent you into a bizarre fit of rage.

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Emperor_Palpatine

Posted by Emperor_Palpatine 10 years ago Report

Um, this is a porn site. If you're expecting the next Vonnegut, you're completely out of luck. That being said, don't be a dick and move on if you don't like it.

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newenglandee

Posted by newenglandee 10 years ago Report

Vonnegut? It isn't that I want a broad, sweeping epic story. I just want a DECENT one that's well-written. And I can honestly say the author's works aren't. That, combined with his terrible, unlikable and unrelatable characters make me really pissed off.

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Emperor_Palpatine

Posted by Emperor_Palpatine 10 years ago Report

I kind of like that his preds are dicks, but that's a kink of mine. The goal of these stories is to get you off, not to provide a deep and engrossing fantasy world where you identify with everyone.

Besides, in a fetish that's all about people gurgling away in others' bellies, I can't imagine that a well written story would be all that healthy or really even good for getting one off.

Then again, this is all my opinion, and it's not like I'm some unwashed plebe with no literary sense. I *love* reading. I just don't expect much from my erotica beyond helping me blow a load.

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newenglandee

Posted by newenglandee 10 years ago Report

Well, it depresses me to see settling for less. There's many artists and writers here on the site who do a good job of combining both elements. It can be hard to FIND them, I admit, but they are there. It just pisses me off that mediocrity is celebrated.

I didn't WANT to hate VoreBoy's work when I first took a peek at it whilst waiting for Sy0p and Iolno to finish their stories. But I have to object on both a literary and moral level to how he presents his stories. I really don't think it'd be THAT hard to make his work a bit better.

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Emperor_Palpatine

Posted by Emperor_Palpatine 10 years ago Report

I will say this, though. It's impossible to settle for less when it's drawn. Perhaps my point of view isn't all that different from yours, it's just where I direct it.

That being said, killing is killing. The morality of it doesn't change based on the age or disposition of the prey unless the pred is a vigilante hero disposing of bad guys via vore. So I'm not sure I agree with your critique of the morality of the situation. Personally, I'm fairly warped so the whole "pregnant prey" kink really does it for me.

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Silverback21

Posted by Silverback21 9 years ago Report

" unless the pred is a vigilante hero disposing of bad guys via vore."

My favorite kind of pred in fatal-vore. :3
Better a predator that goes around killing pedophiles, rapists, murderers, etc, rather than one who goes around killing innocent little kids and pregnant women. I especially like it when the cruel/evil preds get vored. ^-^

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CharlieC

Posted by CharlieC 10 years ago Report

...You know, I was wrong about you.

A few days ago, I mentioned that due to the way you were voicing your complaints to my story, I thought you'd changed and possibly matured a bit. But after reading the comments on this story? Looks like I was completely wrong.

You're still making comments largely for the purpose of making people feel bad about their work, lacing your words with insult after insult.

"Crap like this is why I want to leave and never look back"? "Your protagonists are unlikeable douchebags"? "You ought to be ashamed of yourself"?

Please, PLEASE explain to me why you think these kind of comments would be appreciated on this site, let alone welcome in the first place. In fact, let's take a look at this site's terms of service. Specifically rules 4, 6, and 7.

4 - Be respectful of others at all times.
6 - Personal attacks are prohibited.
7 - Trolling is prohibited.

Well, at the risk of breaking rule 6 myself... go screw yourself. It's obvious that you're still here largely for the purpose of trolling. Sy0p's story is done. My story is done. So why are you still here, leaving comments on stories about how much you hate them and how the author should be ashamed of his work?

I'll tell you why. You're a troll. Plain and simple. And it's right back on my block list for you.

One more thing. If you're going to be using me and my story as comparisons when you try and tell everybody else why their stories are terrible, then I'm going to say this once: Don't mention me or my story again. Don't post in my PCA thread again. Don't send me any private messages. And don't leave comments on any of my work. If I see you do any of these things ANYWHERE on this site after this message is posted, I will send a message to Eka herself.

Good day, sir.

TheVoreBoy, don't mind the troll. Since I have a feeling newenglandee won't, I'll apologize. I'm sincerely sorry that the comments for this story have been filled with this kind of negative talk.

Keep on keepin' on.

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

I've already blocked newenglandee and I could care less about his delusional sense of superiority. His comments here are a testament to everything that's wrong with the world today (particularly cyber bullying), but everyone else who has commented shows there is still hope for humanity. I could have simply deleted everything but I hope everyone who reads this gains a little perspective, so I'm happy to leave it as is. :D

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CharlieC

Posted by CharlieC 10 years ago Report

Yeah, I'm sorry about leaving that long tell-off here in your comment section. It's just that I feel kind of burned because a few days ago, I was stupid enough to give this guy the benefit of the doubt, even though I knew months ago that he was a troll.

Add in that I really hate it when I see people being insulted for their work, which is different from criticized -- at least with criticism, there's usually something you can take away to improve.

So again, I apologize. I just saw his comments here and... kind of snapped. :(

If you want me to remove my comments, I absolutely will.

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

Don't worry about it. No harm done. Glad to meet you. If you like any of my other stories, feel free to comment on them.

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AustinDR

Posted by AustinDR 2 years ago Report

It's a vore world. A pure fantasy. Where the heck did you think morality applied here? It's not like any real person is getting hurt.

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Emperor_Palpatine

Posted by Emperor_Palpatine 10 years ago Report

Oh fuck, that was awesome. Thanks for writing it!

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

I'd like to respond to newenglandee first by saying you don't "demand" anything for something you don't pay for. I'm not a commissioned writer, this is simply a passing hobby. If I were a commissioned writer, my approach would be completely different. Even if you had messaged me personally asking for a tailor-made story and I agreed to do one for free, there is still a degree of respect you should show another person.

I do not claim now, nor have I ever, nor do I ever plan on writing the next great American novel. My stories are short and simplistic because they cater to a obscure sexual fetish. Granted there are some epic erotica in print out there, but I'm not taking this to a publisher in hopes of one day becoming a New York Times Best-Seller.

My characters are one-dimensional (yes their only concerns are eating and sex) because I like them that way. If I were writing for hire or for an actual novel going to print, I could spend months developing their characterization and back-story. I'm not going to do that because I like the simplicity of a short story.

As far as the technical merit of my work, prose, grammar, etc. I know for a fact everyone has seen a lot worse.

To address your obsession with morality, keep in mind these are fictional characters, not real people, and like the Joker, there are some great character one loves to hate.

A woman who has a rape fantasy and enjoys such role play with her lover or spouse is not the same as being a victim of legitimate forced-sex. A person into S&M (being cuffed, whipped, etc) is radically different from someone being sold into slavery. I've never come across a woman or man into S&M who thinks women should be stripped of their civil rights in society or believe that actual slavery should be re-instituted.

To say a person's sexual kink gives you an accurate impression of their beliefs, values, moral outlook or philosophical views is ignorant, plain and simple. For instance, if I were to judge you based solely on your critique, I would have to say you're a highly arrogant, self-righteous individual with an unwarranted sense of superiority. Of course I've never met you, in fact I've never even had a conversation through e-mail with you. Although based on your behaviour I'm glad I haven't.

If you dislike my writings, you are under no obligation to read them. I dislike, furries, hard-vore and female-centric vore - that doesn't mean I go around attempting to demean other people's sense of self worth by pretending to critique something I could never be satisfied by - I simple choose not to read it and let other express their creativity in any way they choose. That being said, I would prefer if you discontinue reading anything I post and never comment on any of my stories again.

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AlekSavarov

Posted by AlekSavarov 10 years ago Report

Well said, TheVoreBoy.

Please don't be disregarded by newenglandee's bizarre comments. I assure you, just a cursory glance at his/her comments on other people's work will sufficiently demonstrate what a delusional, self-righteous person he/she is.

Your stories cater to a specific audience, they are very readable, and (if I say so myself) quite enjoyable. Don't let one rude commenter get you down. Keep up the good work!

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

Thank you for the kind words. And running to my defense. :P

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AlekSavarov

Posted by AlekSavarov 10 years ago Report

No problem. Passive aggressive, self-obssessed bullies like newenglandee drive me crazy. Although I'm afraid it's hopeless trying to reason with people like that...

Regardless, your work on this site is entertaining, and always a pleasure to read. :)

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newenglandee

Posted by newenglandee 10 years ago Report

You had me up until the "a person's sexual kink" thing. It isn't just the kink. That's only a FACTOR in your writing. A huge, big factor, of course, but it isn't the only one. I could go on for HOURS with you on morality and ethics in debate. What I object to is the technical prose (which you handwave by saying others are worse, which isn't much of an excuse so much as a cop out for not improving, as my teachers in English always said) and the flatness of your characters, the lack of detail in describing them and the settings they're in, the VERY poor, non-existent plots, the lack of any sort of logic ANYBODY in your stories seems to have (How does nobody not notice kids going missing when you invite a LION to your freakin' pool party who suddenly is super fat) and the fact that you don't even try to hide behind a kind of satirical curtain. Your stories aren't gripping or dramatic, they're not FUNNY or satirical, they're just, at their best, generic schlock, and they're not even well-written! I can forgive a LOT of terrible things in a story if it makes me care about the characters within, but there's nothing to make me invested whatsoever in the stories you write. They're just SO lacking in SO many ways!

And please don't use the "this is a vore site" excuse. That's a cop out. It's a way to say to others and yourself that you don't have to have high standards for your writing. Your response to me was quite eloquent and intelligent. Why can't you put any of that into your stories? THAT'S all I'm asking from writers here on the site. To PLEASE just TRY to right decent stories, to really give an effort, to show that they care.

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

I'm well aware my response was both eloquent and intelligent - english, as well (as public speaking) have always been my forte. However, as I stated before, writing vore fiction is just a hobby. I'm not going to put the same amount of effort into it that I would for an academic assignment or professional commission.

Writing erotica does not make a high mark on my list of priorities in life. Whether you choose to accept that fact or not is irrelevant as far as I'm concerned. No one here writes, draws or exists to live up to your personal expectations.

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tangent

Posted by tangent 10 years ago Report

I kind of like your stories even more after reading these comments. <3

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

I appreciate that. :)

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tangent

Posted by tangent 10 years ago Report

Jesus Dick, sir or ma'am. This isn't an English class, no matter how badly you want it to be. If you're so upset with the quality of writing on this site then please, by all means, maybe you should take it up with Eka to start a quality control brigade. Please get over yourself. No one wants to hear your whining and references to authors whose works are - at their best, /somewhat/ better than TheVoreBoy's.

Some people have other things to focus on in life in place of improving their obscure fetish story-writing skills.
Some people write stories to please themselves that they know aren't very good, but it gets them off, so who gives a damn?
Some people even share it with the community anyway because it's a nice gesture, even if the stories go unnoticed, high quality or not!

I know these concepts might be hard to grasp with someone with such /impeccable/ tastes as you, but it would probably do your blood pressure and heart well to accept that not everyone gives as many shits as you do.

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Silverback21

Posted by Silverback21 8 years ago Report

(I know this is an old comment chain, but it got me to thinking, hehe. :3)

I can't say anything, I use to think that people who were into fatal vore, that involved innocent prey such as this would be just like the predator they portrayed (cruel, sociopathic, etc.), but after making friends with a few fatal vore preds I've learned that not to be the case, especially with one sweet pred in particular. ^..^

Every now and then though I'll catch myself wondering "If they (the artist/writer/commissioner) could fatal vore innocent people in RL like they do in fantasy, would they?". Mainly because I've had a few tell me they would. I've even had one tell me they would fatal vore children in RL if it were possible. But (thankfully) other than 2-3 people I've asked, they all say they would never fatal vore anyone even if it were possible.

With this story, I think it hit harder than most because it involved killing a woman and her unborn child, not the act itself, but that the pred got off to it sexually. That's what usually causes the knee jerk reaction's some have to fatal vore. The knowledge that there are people getting off on the fantasy of killing or being killed. Personally I can't fathom how anyone could jerk off to the thought of a child or pregnant woman being killed. And despite myself I would be worried to have my children near someone who did get off on fantasizing about devouring/killing children until I knew what it was about the fantasy they got off on and that it wasn't related to anything they'd want to act out in RL.

But any who, that's why I think he may have reacted they way he did, although it's no excuse for his behavior.

As for the story, while I disliked the fatality greatly, I loved all the rest, especially the humor he and Mrs. Takashi shared in the preceding's leading up to the sex (the visual of him groping himself was pretty hot, hehe). Although it does confuse me a little since it was obvious that Rigo liked her as a friend or at least a friendly acquaintance and thought well of her, but killed her anyways, but I suppose it may have just been natural charisma he was exhibiting rather than friendly courtesy. Buuuut then again, I see no fatal tag, so it leaves a smidge of room to believe he miiiiight have had a change of heart and coughed her up.

On any note though it was very well written and descriptive. Great work. ;3

Oh, I talked to you a while back about ideas for a new character and wondered if you were still interested.

Also noticed you liked to RP and was wondering if you'd like to RP sometime. 8D
If so my Skype name is Silverback.21. Send me a contact request on there if you're interested. ;3

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FanficFetishist

Posted by FanficFetishist 10 years ago Report

Pregnant prey? I'll take it. :D

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TheVoreBoy

Posted by TheVoreBoy 10 years ago Report

Glad you liked it.

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Emperor_Palpatine

Posted by Emperor_Palpatine 10 years ago Report

Damn, I still get off to this.

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Obe330

Posted by Obe330 5 years ago Report

His unabashedness is really what makes the character to me in the story. The fact he has no reluctance in crossing so many lines is a likeable trait in and of itself. He's showing he's the boss and it's not exactly like she fought him off from doing anything, deep down she really wanted it. It was a great way to end things with him belching then masturbating as well.

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AustinDR

Posted by AustinDR 3 years ago Report

Love to hate asshole right here. Nice job.

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