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2000-2002
Marcia and Kali continue their adventures, but one of them may go too far…
This one took a long time to write and there were a lot of gaps in between writing due to RL stuff. There are still a few mistakes here and there, but I feel like I was starting to improve at this point.
Posted by VVVx 8 years ago Report
Honestly, this is one of the best stories I've ever read on this site. It details the thoughts and training of the characters very well, has an established universe with its own rules and logical consequences. The characters actions are believable, their thoughts are believable, and their personalities are believable. The only thing i feel off about is the anatomy of the unborn sequence. Does Kali's vagina actually lead straight to her stomach instead of her uterus?
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Posted by the_Wolf 8 years ago Report
Wow, thanks for all the compliments on it! Nice to know you liked so many aspects of this one, especially as an older work. :)
For the anatomy, it's actually mentioned in the first "Double, Double" that they have a spell Kali taught Marcia that can rearrange their inner pathways to make that happen. Granted, it probably would have been good to reiterate that in this one at least once. Chalk it up to my relative inexperience at the time.
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