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Hi everyone!!
My first story ever woooo! It's simple, random, short and straight to the point.
Sorry if my writing is awful, I'm not english but I'll try and improve my style with the next few stories.
Yeah, I had too much fun writing this so it definitely wont be the last one!! 8D
I don't know *when* I'll be able to write another, it might take some time...
But nonetheless, stay tuned!
In the meantime, I hope you'll enjoy this one :3

BIG THANKS to  MutualTaco for proofreading it for me and giving some AWESOME advises.
Special thanks also go to  AugustBebel  shdingo  OpusXS  Andrea  Hermlover21  bluemoon+the+lucario and  Cheerios for the huge inspiration they provided. You guys are awesome *_*

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Reaverbot

Posted by Reaverbot 7 years ago Report

Okay, a few things:

1. For some reason your text is centered. English is meant to be written with a left side alignment. In other words, a paragraph starts on the left side of the page and moves rightwards, rather than starting dead center.

2. Space out your paragraphs once you fix the alignment on your next story.

Both of these will make the next thing you write -way- easier to read.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 7 years ago Report

Unfortunately I know about these problems, I just don't exactly know how to fix them :/
When I wrote it it was fine, don't know why here it looks like this.
Don't worry tho, I'll do my best to make it easier to read next time ^^ I just have to figure out how.
Thanks for reading!!

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 7 years ago Report

I FIXED IT!! :D

Reaverbot

Posted by Reaverbot 7 years ago Report

You fixed the alignment, good job. All that's left is that the paragraphs are a bit messy and strangely formatted, but that might be too much to keep going through and trying to fix.

Still, it is at least readable now. It's a cute story~

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 7 years ago Report

Thanks!! ^^ I'll try to learn how to make some proper paragraphing for my next story

blessedwasthechild

Posted by blessedwasthechild 7 years ago Report

I'm a sucker for cock vore. This is pretty similar to a fantasy of mine that I think about a lot, so this was pretty fun to experience. I think you could have found a way of keeping the pacing fast without sacrificing character accuracy. Without a little more context, Pinkie's "parties" seem like an extraneous detail. This is the only criticism I can think of at this time.

I enjoyed reading it. I hope you're as big of a sucker for cock vore as I am because I've been hoping for more content like this to appear.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 7 years ago Report

OMG Thank you!!! 8D
I'm flattered, really. I LOVE your stories! And yes, I'm a really big sucker for CV too, so I'll definitely write more of it.
Thank you again for the feedback and kind words you're awesome!!! <3 <3

blessedwasthechild

Posted by blessedwasthechild 7 years ago Report

Yay!
and its nothing. I hope you have fun writing your next fic.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 7 years ago Report

I definitely will, and I hope you will as well ^^

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

I want new fic! I want to see Rainbow turn to Apple seed!

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Wow im really glad there is people waiting for more stuff from me!! but unfortunately im pretty busy with school and other irl stuff atm and I don't have much free-time to spend in writing xC
However, stay tuned as the new story is slowly (actually really slowly) shaping up. It will be another CV story (this time involving CTF as well) between twilight, luna and celestia. I may eventually write a sort of sequel or prequel to this Big mac-centered story but I'd like to write some other stories first :3
Thank you very much for the support though! I really appreciate that. :D

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

your more then welcome for the positive feed back and I really hope you can get some free time soon as your a really good writer

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

You know what? yesterday I spent more or less w hours writing the new vorefic mostly thanks to your comment :3 that said, I also realized the new story will turn out to be much longer than this one, and thus it'll take me more time to complete it. I hope it'll be worth the wait ^^.
Also thanks for the kind words, even though I don't feel like I deserve them...

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

You diserve them and more! personally Fluttershy and big mac are my two favorite charecters and cock vore is my favorite type of vore! So personally I was so happy to see a fic like this and hope to see what big mac does with that big load of Fluttercum.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Well, than maybe I could suggest you to take a look here :3
http://www.writing.com/main/interact/item_id/1860344-My-little-Pony-Friendship-is-Magic-vore/map/1421
It's an entire series of chapters focused around big mac CVing ponies, and fluttershy is one of them. I read 'em a long time ago but didn't notice the striking similarities between my story and those chapters until the author (blessedwasthechild) pointed them out to me ^^" I guess I subconsciously took inspiration from them.
That said, I'm glad you and I have similar tastes :D and I'm sorry it's taking me so much to write new stuff but hopefully as my writing skills improves I'll be able to write faster and deliver more stories as time goes on.

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

OMG this is awesome! THANK YOU!

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Haha you're really welcome!! :D

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

Promise me you will tell my the second your done your next story!? I want it now!!! (LOL sorry I was watching a funny movie)

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Well, let's say there's a chance I will... But I can't promise anything xP You don't make a promise if you're not sure you can keep it.
Don't worry though, I'll eventually write it sooner or later :3

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

Sooner or later aint what is used to be now adays

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

Just kidding. take all the time you need

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Thanks for your understanding and support ^^
Meanwhile, I suggest reading these awesome awesome vorefics, if you still haven't
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/183535/futa-aj-roller-derby-sexcapade

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/198850/1/a-sticky-situation-or-shining-armors-got-the-magic-stick

Enjoy!! :D

powerplayer01

Posted by powerplayer01 6 years ago Report

I most certainly will!

hornywing

Posted by hornywing 6 years ago Report

How come I haven't seen this before? You hit on most of the major themes I love on this site. You got some solid characterizations going here while leaving a lot of world building to the reader.

Really glad I read this one. Would love to hear more about what you write and other ideas you have. Thank you for sharing - it makes me want to get off my lazy butt and write some as well.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Oh god thank you so much for the kind words <3
Honestly though, I feel like I can (and should) really improve A LOT more.
But you may be happy to hear I currently plan on finishing a CTF and CV story between Twilight(pred), Luna and Celestia. It'll be quite longer than this one, so it's taking more time and I'm usually lazy as hell. Doesn't help that I started drawing as well and now I don't know what to do: to draw new stuff, or to finish writing planned stuff xP

However, sharing this and my other stuff has been an absolutely wonderful experience so far, and I definitely look forward to release more and more as time goes on. It's takes me a lot of time, but in the end it's totally worth it ^_^

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Oh and btw THANKS for watching!!! <3

hornywing

Posted by hornywing 6 years ago Report

No problem. I must thank you for sharing it in the first place. I look forward to see what CTF or CV you have planned between the MLP crew.

What specific aspects about these topics do you enjoy the most? For example, is CV more about the cum transformations or about the act of capturing to you?

Both are fun in my mind, but I always try to figure out ways to turn little bits of these fun activities in ways that make them new.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Mmmmm, really interesting question...
To me, one of the things that entice me more is the unwillingness of the prey, thus turning vore into an act similar, in a way, to rape. Not only the prey does not want it to happen, but no matter what it cant do anything about it. The complete and absolute control that the predator has over it's prey is thrilling to me.
Another thing I love in vore is when the prey, once digested, "augments" the pred in some way. Be it a new load of cum, or another layer of fat on their ass, or bigger boobs. This is also probably why I like CTF so much, even if it's not exactly a vore act. That said, I still definitely adore the thought of someone going inside someone else, and I love seing bulges, especially when they are really "tight" ones, like servothehusky's. Thats also probably the reason I prefer same size over micro/macro, because in same size bulges are much more evident.

Btw, i have some more stories planned, about 4 or 5 more after the next :3 One being another cv&ctf scenario between chryssy, cadence and shiny, then a 2 parted breast vore and unbirth story involving trixie, snip&snails, twilight and shining armor. After that, another one between twily, luna and celestia in which twilight is half unbirthed by celestia and then TFed into her pussy and crotchbooobs.
Among those, I probably plan on writing both a sequel and a prequel to this story, keeping big mac as the protagonist.

Meanwhile, I'd also like to keep drawing, but unfortunately I don't have nearly enough time to do ANY of this ;_; I'll be delighted to share more with you guys as soon as I can, but I can't promise that it'll actually be soon...

Anyway, thanks again for all of the amazing support you provide me, and I really hope you'll enjoy my incoming stuff! :D :D :D

hornywing

Posted by hornywing 6 years ago Report

No problem. It's nice to know that other folks enjoy this as much as I do. I agree about the same size as well as the bulges - these are very big ways to show the domination and control you have over the prey - not only through domination but by literally changing their body. Always fun stuff. :)

I'll see if I can muster up a few mini-stories. I don't write much in the MLP universe but I'll see what draws my fancy.

Take care!
HW

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Can't wait to read your stuff then, whenever you'll post it ^^

You take care too!

FoolyFox

Posted by FoolyFox 6 years ago Report

When she screamed for all of it to stop and started to sink under all the rising cum. That's my favorite part! I really like how her voice turns to indefinable bubbling. So wonderful hearing prey try to speak before they melt away forever. <3

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Wahahahaaa I'm so glad you liked it!!! *w* yeah, I love it too when they do that.
Btw, that BigMac CVs Flutterbat series you did? I love it SOOOO MUCH!! It's truly amazing!! I adore the way you fade the outlines of the prey while they digest!!
Tbh, I'd really love to see more mlp stuff from you x3 <3 <3

FoolyFox

Posted by FoolyFox 6 years ago Report

Well I actually have one more MLP thing I want to do but I'm not sure when it will be done. It makes me feel good knowing you enjoy my work so much. It really means a lot to me.

You're love helps give me determination to draw even more. It is very much appreciated. ^\/^

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

I know that feeling, trust me ^3^ and I'm so excited to see your upcoming stuff!! <3

GTSdev

Posted by GTSdev 6 years ago Report

Fuuuck!! this is amazing! i could like FEEL her in there ~ this story is amazing and right to the action aswell!! good job!!

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Oh my gooood thank youuuuu that actually means so much to meee <3<3<3<3 I LOVE your stuff!!! You're one of my fave artist!! Knowing that you enjoyed it is so amazing, Im so glad you did!! x3333 Stay awesome and keep rocking!! And have a great day as well!!!

(Btw, yesterday i wanted to chat a bit on your live stream but I was too lazy to make an account... sorry about that x( )

GTSdev

Posted by GTSdev 6 years ago Report

Its quite allright :D keep doing your stuff, its amazing read and right to the point while being nicely incharacter.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Oh I will!! The second story is in the making, so stay tuned~ x3

Ilovevore1

Posted by Ilovevore1 6 years ago Report

I hadn't ever been to concerned by reading a story about a vore/sex before on this site, but decided to give it a shot. This is the first one I fully read on here and I absolutely loved it! I can't wait to see more and more from you! ^_^

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

And once again you successfully make me blush to death ahaha x333
I'm humbled, really, to have been you're first vorefic on here, and I'm soooo glad you liked it.
Btw I haven't forgot about writing!! The second one is still in the works, but it's just taking a LOT to finish... I'll release it eventually, don't worry.
In the meantime, please, take a read to these absolutely amazing and hella better mlp cv vorefics than mine xD
http://aryion.com/g4/view/248852
https://aryion.com/g4/view/291033
Enjoy!! and plz keep searching for more and support their authors, who are clearly way more talented than I am and deserve much more praise 83
Thanks so much for the kind words and have a great day!!

1847291

Posted by 1847291 6 years ago Report

amazing one of the best CV stories I have ever read!

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 6 years ago Report

Omg thank you!! :D I'm still planning to make more, stay tuned.

PonyTime

Posted by PonyTime 5 years ago Report

I was just about to fav this, then the last sentence mentioned next was Rainbow Dash, then I was like, "OKAY, Not faving! NOT COOL! LEAVE RAINBOW DASH ALONE!"

So... yeah... Almost awesome, but it's just decent because of that last sentence. Did I mention I'm sensitive about Rainbow Dash? I really am. And I have no idea how to fix that about myself.

SilverHornedDeer

Posted by SilverHornedDeer 5 years ago Report

Lol, don't worry about that. If I'll ever decide to get back at writing, it most probably won't be any time soon. As of right now, I already got way too many personal projects in the works, both sfw and not, not to mention real life stuff like jobs and whatnot, and I gotta prioritize.
Eventually, more vore stuff will still be coming, but I have no idea of when exactly that will happen.

PonyTime

Posted by PonyTime 5 years ago Report

Ok lol. Good luck