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A good lesson for anyone who thinks it's okay to be mean.
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Posted by Lophane 8 years ago Report
Nice story, I liked it.
Only thing I have to say is that I found the sudden switch from long paragraphs to short person switches so what jarring, but not bad
Posted by Vision 8 years ago Report
Many thanks for the critique and the kind words - I'm glad you liked it! :)
This is some of my older stuff; one of my more recent pieces is far different (of course, it's far from what I'd consider "great"). Feel free to check it out and leave your criticism there if you'd like - I'd greatly appreciate it!
Posted by joeburp22181 8 years ago Report
Pretty darn tooten story.
Posted by Vision 8 years ago Report
Thank you!
Posted by artimus261 8 years ago Report
love it! hope we maybe see emily and her necklace again!