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A Mistress And Her Slave By Xenenderson11

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Tags: Anal Vore BBW pred Child Prey Cruel Digestion domination entrapment Evil F/F F/HF full tour H/F hyper scat multiple preds Non-Fatal Oral Vore Regurgitation Scat Scat Torture Semi-willing Sex SSbbw pred Submissive Slave Underaged Unwilling Willing Edit

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An incredibly long story that I finally finished! It took me so long to write this, at least two weeks I mean, from conception to end. I really hope it's appreciated because I put a lot of effort into this. There may be some grammatical errors and probably some parts that seemed rushed, but I'll chisel those out whenever I don't have something better to work on. The ending is also kinda sappy, but it didn't work any other way so I hope it works.

Basically, the premise is that in another universe, vore is legal but only with slaves, and young herm mistress Ziz wants to experiment with her beloved slave girl Emily. It's long, true, but I never failed to make it fun! A sex scene and three vore sequences, this story should interest a good many fans I hope. I pray you all love it ^^ Enjoy! <3 xoxoxo

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Drizztt44

Posted by Drizztt44 1 year ago

The aunt seems bipolar in this story considering her drasticly changed attitude and its more then a little hard to accept. That she would not only drop her resentment for Emily "corrupting" her Ziz but also suddenly turning supportive is just way to much all at once. More time and events are needed to change someone, perhaps using a time skip of a few months or years before the aunt gave her support would make it more believable.

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 1 year ago

Dude...it's a vore story. Not much I can do.

Stellarcircle17

Posted by Stellarcircle17 1 year ago

Just about all my criticisms (not that I'm a writer) have already been addressed in some way, so I have a lovely opportunity to say how much I love this piece of work. Bust out the climbing gear because here comes a wall of text!

My reaction when I finished reading this was one of being very impressed. Rather than sentences, I was thinking "such love," "such patience," "so much into it" because I really felt how much of yourself you put into writing this. The time and effort gone through and devoted, you know? The love and patience put into it. (Am I being over the top?)

You also really brought to life the characters you wrote. I could feel their emotions. You simultaneously made me genuinely worried for a character and turned on like a perv.

Thank you so much for writing this and sharing it. It was a great ride to read.

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 1 year ago

Wow, thank you dearest : ) That really makes me feel good to hear that. It was a long write, but I had fun the whole time ^^ as for the emotions of the characters I like understanding who these people are before I can really get into them; it just naturally happens, I sort of become the character as I write them, as a famous writer once said.

I'm glad I could make you feel for the characters, as well as turn you on ; )

Thank you for the comment ^^ I truly appreciate it <3 xoxo

ThisGuy127

Posted by ThisGuy127 1 year ago

I spent the day reading through this, and I have to say it was quite captivating. There was a lot of ways this could have come to an end, really, I was waiting to see the last few lines, but... and forgive me here... the shit kept piling up.

Even with how long this was, It didn't feel unnatural to follow. Everything was blunt and understandable for the most part, so there was definitely room for the imagination to take root and play with ideas of what was to come. I will admit that the ending kind of played a bit fast, but even then there was some real sincerity in it.

Being around the time I should be asleep, forgive me if I am coming off a bit scrambled. In summary, a great read. I came expecting a one off master/slave snuff kind of thing, and left with a good story to remember.

PS: Bonus points on the rescue method, bit of deus ex machina on the anatomy lesson, but considering there was an 11 foot whale of a woman apparently being in perfect health, I was willing to accept aliens were to blame.

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 1 year ago

Thank you! Thank you! ^^ This too makes me happy to hear! I always try to be unique with the way I write. I am, after all, a writer, and I take delight in hearing my style is enjoyed. Thank you again, the support helps more than you think <3 xoxo

ThisGuy127

Posted by ThisGuy127 1 year ago

Aye, I love to write myself, as well as RP. I don't post my writings though, bit of a self esteem issue. I really am glad to see that such a unique story wasn't locked away in some computer file like my story list. ^^;

I don't want to be "that guy" in saying that a following to this needs to happen, but I can see some future situations these characters of yours could end up in that may make for a story to follow. If you weren't already working on your own ideas.

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 1 year ago

Oh don't worry, I already plan to make sequels for all my regulars ^^ But I'm sure your writing is great hun : ) Don't limit yourself just because of what you think of yourself. Do what you want with your writing, and if you want to show the world then there will be someone out there who will love your artwork, just as you loved mine after I decided not to hide ^w^

Do not be ashamed of your work. If you think it's good then no one else should matter. <3 xoxo

TortureSlave

Posted by TortureSlave 1 year ago

[Kiri] Awh... This is so adorable... Vince and I both actually cried at Em's mini-speech at the end... O_O

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 1 year ago

Awwwwm thanks. Vince is a love or a friend, I presume? I'm glad you liked it; it's one of my personal favs. Run over to my VSIBWO for future projects, and to give feedback or ideas ^^ And sorry to make you guys cry, I just like to end happily most of the time ^u^ Anyway, thanks for being a part of it <333 xoxoxo

AnonymousHuman

Posted by AnonymousHuman 11 months ago

Love the story, but I do have a suggestion!
During the where Cetecea has Emily in her bedroom, a spinoff story could be made about Cetecea being a futa and those two having some unwilling fun?
Just a thought!
Love the story, very sappy which is good!

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 10 months ago

Hmm..that gives me some ideas, but the story is fine as it is ^^ Thank you for the input I appreciate it all and I'm glad you loved the story. But sappy? : O How was it sappy!?

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

Omg I honestly LOVE this story and I wish it had a continued version, that would honestly be sooooo awesome

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

I'm not very fluent btw so that's why this is so short

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 6 months ago

Oh thank you, love ^^ fluency isn't a problem, just knowing you love it is enough.

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

But anyways, just a question is there any possibility of a sequel??

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

Cuz if so, this story DEFINITELY has some hella potential

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 6 months ago

I'm not sure if there will be a sequel. Not sure what plotline it would have, plus everything wraps up rather nicely in this story. Any sequel wouldn't have a good chance of matching let alone surpassing the quality of AMAHS. I'm not sure it really needs a sequel.

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

Fairpoint

Xenenderson11

Posted by Xenenderson11 6 months ago

Well I was planning one, I just didn't know where I'd go with it.
Instead I thought to have sequels for stories that still have loose ends like Serra and Violet or ones that have less emotional value to insult if it goes wrong like Jackie's Horse.

Richmon365

Posted by Richmon365 6 months ago

Yeah....