Posted by Jakester443 8 years ago Report

Simply incredible. Brilliant writing, excellent flow, and amazing attention to personality. You've done this lore an excellent service.

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thank you! I hope I have… Zoey's mercurial personality and interactions with her babysitter were interesting (and fun) to explore.

Posted by bartek21 8 years ago Report

great story. incredible attention to detail. as you read this imagination works. nicely describe the inside of her mouth. please more !!
Please more adventurous zoey!!

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thanks! I've got no plans for more at present, but who knows? I'd probably like to write about Zoey again at some point.

Posted by Apostolos 8 years ago Report

Amazing

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thank you; glad you enjoyed it.

Posted by Apostolos 8 years ago Report

The map on the previous part was rather helpful

Posted by Tsavo 8 years ago Report

Love the Flash series, and this is a worthy addition. Well written as always.

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thank you. Zoey is an instantly memorable character; I couldn't resist writing about her.

Posted by DustInMiEye 8 years ago Report

Always love reading your same size stories :D
Great writing, and adds perfectly to the animated game!

Hope to read more in the future :3

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thanks! Zoey's quite an irresistible character. I couldn't tear myself away from writing this.

Posted by mach-one 8 years ago Report

I love the zoey character, you really manage to capture the casualness with which she eats people in this story, in the story she really seems like the kind of girl who thinks way more than she lets others know, whether it is by what she says or her actions so I guess you nailed her.

Also, thanks for introducing me to the baby fat series, that's quite a discovery to make ;)

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

I stumbled across that series by chance, and couldn't believe I'd never noticed it before! :)

Thanks. I'm very glad you feel that captures the essence of Zoey's character, while also giving us a few additional hints into the way her mind works. Of course, it's only my own interpretation of someone else's character, but she's quite fascinating to write about. Especially in a first person narrative from the point of view of her babysitter, who knows what Zoey is doing but who can't resist her anyway.

Posted by AdjectiveNounCombo 8 years ago Report

I'm starting to read this part now. I enjoyed the first one. Nice little fan tribute. Maybe I'll pull elements of this into the canon.

Posted by French_snack 8 years ago Report

Thanks; glad you're enjoying it! Zoey is quite an endearing and irresistible character. It was fun exploring her possible interactions with her babysitter. She knows how to get what she wants from him (and he knows very well what she's doing), but (as you've shown) she's also become genuinely fond of him.