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Variant By Dark_phoenix -- Report

My belated (a month late) birthday story for  variant

Many different kinds of vore.
Let me know what you thought of it.

Perhaps I've could have gone more descriptive during certain parts but I feel it did go well enough.
Perhaps too much purple unicorn syndrome.

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Variant

Posted by Variant 5 years ago Report

Very nice! This was very cool and a pleasant surprise. Sounds like Twilight will really be enjoying these lessons.

Dark_phoenix

Posted by Dark_phoenix 5 years ago Report

I am sure she will.
What was your favourite part of the story?
Just looking for feedback.

Variant

Posted by Variant 5 years ago Report

I definitely found the threat of potential ingestion to be great part. Her eventual stay in the womb was fine, but I liked imagining that at any point they could take her down to their stomach for a permanent stay.

BoomBewm

Posted by BoomBewm 5 years ago Report

So, after reading it I have to say it was good. Nice amount of description for the foreplay but I personally feel that you should add more description to the sex scenes. They felt a bit rushed and glossed over.

Dark_phoenix

Posted by Dark_phoenix 5 years ago Report

I will try to improve on that. Thanks for the feedback