Posted by darklord42 8 years ago Report

Interesting Now I you could Have Naruto eat girls like kushina and mikoto and samui after having sex and not digestioning them that would be interesting

Posted by darklord42 8 years ago Report

Well really them getting pregnant and safe in Naruto's stomach

Posted by darklord42 8 years ago Report

Yes I do but unless she can have kids with woman you could do that right?

Posted by darklord42 8 years ago Report

Yeah Have Naruko make a harem

Posted by darklord42 8 years ago Report

Think you can do that

Posted by Flame14 8 years ago Report

While enjoyable I have to admit that this one didn't feel all that different from your other stories. It is good to see Kushina getting to be on the pred side of things and I do hope you have more appearances for her later on.

Posted by Enteresting 8 years ago Report

I did try my best with this one, but as I haven't written anything for a while it was kind of hard to find something that was different. And yes Kushina will be a little more of a pred in the near future, though it'll take me a while to get something solid that doesn't read or feel the same.

Posted by Flame14 8 years ago Report

Practice makes perfect as they say. Try reading some of the other Naruto related vore stories here and pay attention to how they are being written out. Focus on the ones that give you the best imagery with their writing and that seem to flow from one point to another.

Just keep practicing when you can and looking for feedback on your stories. It really does help. I'll be keeping my eyes open for any other stories you write, and your welcome to use the list of ideas I sent you if you want. Mind you don't need to keep the ideas exactly the same or using the same characters I did.

Posted by Enteresting 8 years ago Report

I will for checking out other stories and practicing. Thank you.