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Tay's Early Bird Snack By theweirdone445

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Commissioned by  PhoenixCrown

Here's my first writing commission! Be wary, I had next to zero knowledge of Hyperdimension Neptunia before this story, so please forgive any potential character issues just this once. I wouldn't call this my best, either, but I had fun writing out some of the more eccentric ideas.

Neptune has invited the other goddesses to a party in Planeptune, and Vert decides to bring along a new friend whose secret might complicate the gathering...

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 2 years ago

I think you did a hum-dinger of a good job :).

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Flame14

Posted by Flame14 2 years ago

The only negative I have is the rapid digestion, and that's more of a personal thing as I like reading about the prey struggling as they digest. Never seen the show myself but I did enjoy reading this. I do wonder if we will get a final version with all four goddesses having met their end in Verts new friend, Tay.

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massvore

Posted by massvore 2 years ago

You should try their games, it really funny.

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VertGreenHeart

Posted by VertGreenHeart 1 year ago

Vert and Lady Wac rules

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Pickyfanboy

Posted by Pickyfanboy 2 months ago

But Uzume is best Goddess

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SirVile67

Posted by SirVile67 2 years ago

Hyperdimension Neptunia is a game series. It does however have an anime based on the games.

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 2 years ago

If you were going to play a neptunia game then play the rebirth series. More polished

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VertGreenHeart

Posted by VertGreenHeart 1 year ago

Sooooooooo
4 months passed have you converted yourself as a follower of leanbox omo

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massvore

Posted by massvore 2 years ago

Character wise you are mostly on point about the CPU attitude. So I think you did a great job.^_^

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VertGreenHeart

Posted by VertGreenHeart 2 years ago

to think one of my favorite vore Author written a vore story about me ono

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 2 years ago

I hope PhoenixCrown and VertGreenHeart are happy because me i'm not because Blanc is my waifu and seeing her hurt make me feel bad to see my waifu hurt

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 2 years ago

I just like seeing you suffer >:D!

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

Really you like seeing me suffer because i love Blanc so much and i will never let her down like that so i have two choice save her or joins her

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 1 year ago

X3 hehehe

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

I will save her no matter what i will go back in the past and stop Tay before she eat Blanc and nobody can stop me

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 1 year ago

You're a riot XD! I like you

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

You like me ?

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 1 year ago

You're funny

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

What do you mean i'm funny ?

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 1 year ago

Don't worry about it~

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

Well okay but can you at least tell me why you find me funny

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Deleteduser5cj39

Posted by Deleteduser5cj39 1 year ago

Nope. :^3

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 1 year ago

Why not ?

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VertGreenHeart

Posted by VertGreenHeart 1 year ago

XD

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Pickyfanboy

Posted by Pickyfanboy 2 months ago

I think it's because of your devotion to Blanc

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massvore

Posted by massvore 2 years ago

If it makes you feel better, Neptune save 3 days ago so we can reload from there afterwards :)

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 2 years ago

That mean i can save Blanny rights ?

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massvore

Posted by massvore 2 years ago

yep ^_^

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Seblennon

Posted by Seblennon 2 years ago

BTW thank you for make me feel better now that i know i can save Blanny before that happen

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massvore

Posted by massvore 2 years ago

np

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DoubleA2015

Posted by DoubleA2015 1 year ago

I really liked this story. Keep up the good work.

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VertGreenHeart

Posted by VertGreenHeart 1 year ago

To be fair I'm surprised you don't know Neptunia since the same ppl made all the games you wrote stories about in the past.

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