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Menage a Trois By nephilim -- Report

This is a dark erotica; a guilty pleasures piece with sex and vore.

Raw and uncensored, it will linger indulgently, brazenly unfolding into a toxic romance that stems from a dangerous, consuming addiction.

But, as we will learn, addiction can be a weapon pointed on both ends.
http://aryion.com/g4/view/260063
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Preview: He felt hot and rough, stretching her apart.

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Damsel

Posted by Damsel 5 years ago Report

So it begins!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

These two were too amazing to keep to ourselves (;

Damsel

Posted by Damsel 5 years ago Report

Agreed. This is only the tip of the iceberg!

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 5 years ago Report

Oh Nephilim and Damsel! What a great start. And as a snake sheds his skin, there is Danny, the workman, laying in wait like a lion stalking a gazelle.
What a great start ladies. Nephilim, I love the absolute solidity of Danny's character. You have kept him true Danny, like this is another chapter of one of your best loved tales.
Damsel, I look forward to seeing your writing. I am quickly becoming a fan after skimming your works. I definitely need to come back when time allows to fully consume and digest you literary morsels.
I look forward to watching this new tale of lust and terror evolve.

Delicioso!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Thank you, my dear. Always great seeing you in my neck of the woods (:

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Ah, my dear silly Darius. Would you expect anything less of dear ol' Danny? (;

Scratch

Posted by Scratch 5 years ago Report

Wow, what a hook! And not clear at all it's a collab, there are no seams though Heather and Danny both have their own feel. I'm really taken at how snappy the narrative runs, the sense of realism and the small but vital details. I'll look forward to reading these!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Ah, Scratch. What a pleasant surprise seeing you come around reading material such as this. I really hope you enjoy (;

Scratch

Posted by Scratch 5 years ago Report

I gotta apologize I've taken so long to get around to reading your stuff; it's still a bit outside of my interests, much as I tend to be a vore generalist. But the hook really snagged me and I'm looking forward to reading on for the writing if nothing else; hoping of course to be more pleasantly surprised!
I may need to take notes too << >>

Damsel

Posted by Damsel 5 years ago Report

These two are just ugh.

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 5 years ago Report

Such beautiful writing. You create such an interesting feminine perspective.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Thank you (:

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 5 years ago Report

OMG, you two are killing me. I keep coming back just to read this incredible lead up to something horrifying that I can't wait to see happen.
And Heather....I am in love. She looks and sounds just like my perfect woman.
The pill swallow was beautiful and perhaps very much what it would feel like to swallow a tiny human.
The sidewalk crack...very nice. There is metaphorical vore sprinkled lovingly all through this amazing writing.
Beautiful work Nephilim and Damsel.

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nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

*cackles* Just you wait and see (; the lead up is worth it. Trust me.

But, a bit of a disclaimer here. It's not going to happen the way you think it will. The - ahem - eventual horror is wickedly intense.

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 5 years ago Report

"Large glass of water in hand, she took a big sip, and popped the pill onto her tongue.
Then, swallowed.
She felt every inch of it.
How her throat clung to the thickness that slipped down and down, clinging lazily, like it was taking its sweet time.
But.
Was it this? Was this what it felt like to swallow a tiny human?
Did he -- uncontrollably, her thoughts wormed free from the dark pocket in her brain -- did he feel it? That descent that bulged in her throat, did he feel that? The pressure in her chest as it moved beneath her ribs -- did a tiny human traveling through him move the same way?"

Jesus Nephilim! I can't get this out of my mind. I keep coming back and reading this over and over again. Picturing beautiful Heather, and her beautiful mouth, and her beautiful tongue.

That big fat pill sitting on her glistening tongue, on a velvety lawn of tastebuds. Then the water. Sliding back quickly. Squeezing through the slit formed by her soft palate and her tongue. Squeezed by her firm tonsils. Through this tight gate where every other pill. Every sip of water. Every morsel of food that entered into her body had passed.

Caressed by her long, silky uvula and the rugged tastebuds and lymph nodes forming the landscape at the base of her tongue.

The drop into the cleft behind her arytenoid cartillage, the base of her epiglittis. Beautiful, glistening like a dew soaked orchid petal. Stuck, floating in a great pool of frothy saliva and stringy clots of mucous.

Then free again, squeezed through her superior esophageal sphincter and into her tight esophagus. Embraced by it's wet pulsating walls. Darkness. Heat. Her heart beat. So sensual and intimate. Soaked in her sticky saliva. Falling. Falling until meeting it's demise in her stomach.

Back I come to read this again..........

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

*falls over and dies* WOW. You made that sound stunningly erotic and beautiful. That was incredible, Darius.

I need to... borrow that. Absolutely amazing.

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 5 years ago Report

Thank you for inspiring it. Please do. I would love to see what you would turn this into.

Damsel

Posted by Damsel 5 years ago Report

Just wait until they clash. Me and Neph would sent messages back and forth with incoherent animal sounds because of these two.

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 5 years ago Report

Hahahahaha............I know those sounds! I definitely look forward to seeing what was spawned in those "moments"

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Ignore the time stamp. This was privated for a few days, and updated to be published at 1:51 AM EST. So don't freak out, thinking you missed it (;

Littledude

Posted by Littledude 5 years ago Report

Like the suspenseful atmosphere, it feels like they're both leading each other on.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 5 years ago Report

Thank you!
UGH THESE TWO. THESE TWO. They are just... I enjoy their rapport and their dynamic way too much.

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 5 years ago Report

Some thoughts as I read.
-Interesting how Heather seems to adopt the 'approach' role in the nightclub scene. She barely gives Danny a chance at first, he has to work to try to put the 'pressure' back on to her.

-I really envy how good you are at limiting descriptions only to the most important thing at any given moment. I want to emulate that in the latest story I'm writing--it's not easy!

-What neighborhood are the characters from?

-The idea of a young woman just sitting, 'sizzling in desire', is very cute :)

-"I'm not easy, I swear" XD ... everyone's easy when they meet someone attractive enough : )

-I've been reading the various pick-up-artist books recently out of curiosity, it's interesting to see where your character Danny follows the formula or breaks it and takes a risk.

ScrambleandClick

Posted by ScrambleandClick 4 years ago Report

[Little Pill: Hand Job]

Normally, I'd be putting some examples of my favorite quotes, but.... there's too many of them @[email protected] That was a welcome twist to see Heather and Daniel fence verbally even though she in her shrunken state! It also felt incredibly more satisfying to have Heather put him in a corner like this compared to Aisha since I don't think Heather had the educational expertise Aisha had with reading people? Correct me on that.

There was also this snippet that tripped me over:
> Because Heather could see that she had delved into him deep, so deep that she found the divide, the murky gray expanse wherein man and beast lay together. She had found the scared ground of both.
Was that scared, scarred, or sacred? I just want to make sure that my internal autocorrect is working properly.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

I believe the answer is yes. Yes to all three, actually.
You bring up a good point, but a very realistic one; a lot of times laypeople can be infinitely more intuitive and accurate than trained professionals. Heather understands him more explicitly than Aisha could ever hope to.

Although LP shouldn't really be discussed with Revs, lol. (Despite it being canonical shh)

ScrambleandClick

Posted by ScrambleandClick 4 years ago Report

@the scared/scarred/sacred clarification: Huh, that's a new way at things O_o. I'm guessing scared because this isn't a part of his mind that hasn't been trodded on so often, so he's defensive when people look at that middle part of him? Likewise, scarred for him wishing people'd trod in that part of his head more often and sacred because he prefers it when he treasures both sides of him blended together (vs fighting each other in his head)?

@The point about lay people vs normal people and analyzing them: If I had to take a guess at why this happens, I guess there's an unconscious humility in play (even if a person may've already formed behavioral templates to analyze people with to help protect themselves)?

They (== common people) know they can't be 100% accurate with these templates, so they're willing to look at additional information to adjust those templates and/or create specialized ones for the people they treasure the most. Trained professionals, however, are far more confident to the point of being arrogant with using these stencils.

^At least that's how I think o-o.

@The last bit: I know xD. But I couldn't help but find that bit fascinating.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

I know it is so satisfying to see Heather beat him at his own game. And, what about that twist. That he said it first (;

Out of curiosity, what were your favorite quotes? I'm normally interested in such things, because it gives me an idea of where to focus my craft as a writer

ScrambleandClick

Posted by ScrambleandClick 4 years ago Report

I was glad that he acknowledged it after how long the convo went. If he wasn't going to, I'd've probably thought, "Boy, take some chill pills first."


As for my favorite qutoes, let me go grab them in chronological order (Other than the excerpt that jarred my attention for a bit. Had Heather been trapped in a jar instead of a cup, this would've been a horrible pun.) and write out a little thing explaining why I liked them:

> "I can't wait to see your fucking face when you wake up." Then, almost as an after thought: "At least you're more manageable this way. Portable, even. And!" he chirped "You're comatose so you can't talk back. Ha! This is great. Why can't you be like this all the time?" Patently amused, he snickered and swept from the apartment. "Let's go home."

This made me think of Daniel showing off Heather like his favorite USB stick. I don't know why I thought this, but it probably has to do with me associating the word portable with those. It'd be awful (but amusing!) if he used her for even less depraved things, as awkward of a thing that is to say.

> Heather lifted her stubborn chin. What had the others said? Please don't eat me? Please don't kill me? I'm so scared, Danny, why are you doing this? Shit, I'd eat me too if I started carrying on wailing like some floozy.

Went from dark to strangely amusing, but still horrific humor here. The even more amusing part about this is that it isn't Daniel that's injecting it!

> "I love you, too!" She shouted, flinging her arms wide in a theatrical arch, laughing in the high peaks of hysteria. "What the hell, I've got nothing left to lose! You're still an annoying son of a bitch. And now you're an even bigger son of a bitch, but you're still you. Yeah, so what. You want to eat me. I'm hot. I'd eat me, too." Heather shrugged. "I love you, you idiot. Even now, because this is... this is you. This is totally something you'd do. I'm just surprised you haven't popped a cup over me sooner."

When I read this, I was thinking, "Good for you, Heather! But I think you should dial down your enthusiasm a weeeee bit because you'll end up getting -"

> "You lie," he hissed. But wouldn't he have detected artifice in those sweet captive doe-eyes? He shot to his feet again, jabbing an accusatory finger at her. "NO." He snarled. "You fucking lie." And he would, he would fucking lunge onto the table and drive his teeth into her, he would leave her bloody and raw --

"This. Now you've done it, Heather. Please verbally fence your way out of this or you're going to be royally fucked. Both literally and non literally and that IS a pun."

> "Are you seriously calling me a fucking liar, Danny? ME?" And she waltzed right up to his face. "I never once lied to you. Not then and not fucking now! You were the one with the secrets! I tore myself open for you. I gave you everything! And it still wasn't enough! Is it ever enough?!"

Heather raised a good point here. She also impressed me with the amount of willpower she showed here and forward on from the story because she was <i>relentless</i> with proving her personhood.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

You hit the nail on the head. Heather is relentless in proving her personhood.

I adore strong female characters. Which is why I resent when I'm called out as a misogynist :/

Littledude

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Good imagery and vivid description. The power play is very noticeable.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

It's all about the power, baby (;

PitchBlue89

Posted by PitchBlue89 4 years ago Report

Well. I wish I knew what to say other than thank you. I'll come up with something more coherent later. My words don't seem to work at the moment.

Great work guys.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Thank you (;
Although my partner has taken leave of the site until further notice.

NezumiNom

Posted by NezumiNom 4 years ago Report

Dear fucking hell, I love these two. Their interaction is so unlike anything I've ever seen. And Danny--DANNY-- is showing more emotion and opening up to her, all because she's being defiant and different, and what he has in store for her later? I feel she's gonna regret it.
But seriously, I also just LOVE TO PIECES the size difference and how you two play around that. Danny's immensity, Heathers wild but helpless butterfly-likeness, how he curls his fingers around her in fascination and lust and control, despite being almost out of control when she lectured him (which I still find hilariously astounding). Like. It's fuckin beautiful. The writing, the visuals, the scenery and colors, the contrast and comparison of the characters, it's all wonderful.
You and your partner absolutely awe me. It's fantastic~

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

I KNOW. Their interaction is /incredible/. I was kept up at night RPing these scenes (YOU CAN SEE WHY OMG). Although I must admit I totally re-hauled some of our content so that it could read more like a story... but UNF.

And these two actually... work as a couple. I have to give props to Damsel though - whom, during the show-down, wrote to me in a panic asking me how the hell she could get Heather out of his predicament - for coming up with the wildly absurd and hysterical chorused "I LOVE YOU." *cackle* I told her to just have Heather be unrelentingly, brutally honest --

-- and it worked (;

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Oh, and I'm a sucker for macro/micro situations that aren't always forgone and lead to vore. I LOVE the interplay

NezumiNom

Posted by NezumiNom 4 years ago Report

OH, of course, and I love how seamless you made the perspectives flow.
Ha, the insane vore couple. I love it. Heather's breaking down into hysterics actually had me laughing too XD no wonder Danny was so stricken with a moment of "what the fuck" haha. Honesty and insanity go hand in hand, it seems!
Ohh I knowww god macro/micro is FABULOUS no matter what the situation~ <3
And there will be more of it too, fff I can't wait~! These two and their crazy ways with each other are so addicting to read~

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

This particular RP "stanza" I had to completely re-draft and re-write (dialogue was shifted around a bit, too) so that it had a more organic flow. Merging the perspectives is the hardest part, only because it requires some fancy foot work with inversions of pronouns and sentence transitions, and it can break the flow if I don't go over it with a careful hand !_!

I laughed when Damsel wrote that part, too. I was like 'she did NOT just do that.' Luckily, Danny writes himself - otherwise I would have been totally /STUMPED/ LOL.

P.S., my favorite part is when Danny's all "Ha, you can't talk back, you're comatose. Perfect girl friend material!" And I'm just like... yup, he writes himself. I laughed.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

And yessss, they're totally addicting. My goal is to write this in the same vein as "50 Shades" -- insomuch as creating that 'fly-on-the-wall' perspective where you feel so naughty eavesdropping on them

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

And, again, credit to Damsel, because we took this total laissez-faire approach when we RP'd together. There were /no/ guard rails or 'safe-words.' If Danny ended up killing her at some point -- then, so be it. It was no holds barred. So she did an amazing job weaseling Heather out of this situation.

But what was key -- what was TOTALLY KEY -- is that Heather didn't treat him differently. He was STILL Danny ... and he happened to be bigger. And, literally, thusfar, she's the only character to have behaved in that manner in such a predicament. ** And by her /actions/ she proved to him that she could accept his inner monster.

And THAT is what totally arrested him. By treating him NORMALLY, he had no choice but to respond /normally/. (erm, normal for him).

** (Actually, this may not be true. There are several scenes between Danny/Nita, wherein Nita still treats him/speaks with him as though he is still normal, and I think -- that, in part -- is why Nita is still alive to this day)

And, even then, it's not a fail-safe approach. Basically, if you behave more like prey, evincing all of the key characteristics of /being/ prey -- then, yes, you're going to arouse and excite the beast. And the more the beast is aroused, the more one may dissolve into prey state of being. So, it's self-perpetuating.

But, the more you behave like a /person/ that happens to be shrunken, the more you will arouse and intrigue the man, and maybe - just maybe - survive to tell the *tail (;

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 4 years ago Report

Lovely writing on this chapter. By the end, I was excited for more. You actually transferred your fetish to this reader. A little woman to lick and suck on and toy with is starting to sound fun ! When's the next chatper?? : )

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Oh, there will be more (; There will definitely be more.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Next chapter will happen this week (; probably by week's end.

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 4 years ago Report

that was fast! haha.

Sexy chapter here. (writes down your various metaphors for PIV for later plagarism :3)

As I read what you write I'm beginning to slowly better understand your version of the rape fantasy. It's not about punishing the woman, it's about the irresistibility of the man, the way he weakens nearby women, makes them feel out of their own control.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Fast? I know, wasn't it !? An opportunity presented itself today, wherein I could write to my heart's content.

As for the rape fantasy.... it's not /just/ about punishing the woman; it also underscores how /desirable/ the woman is. The power of her allure is such that a man wants her regardless of her permission.

Punishment can be sexy, too, even part of a rape fantasy. So, as you can see, it's rather nuanced (;

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 4 years ago Report

Nuanced. Of course. : )

Damsel

Posted by Damsel 4 years ago Report

I love the names of these chapters. Because when you boil it down: boners

PitchBlue89

Posted by PitchBlue89 4 years ago Report

Feckin Heck, that got intense. Well done guys.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Thank you ~ Yes. It even gets worse from here. Trust us

PitchBlue89

Posted by PitchBlue89 4 years ago Report

Worse ? or Better :)

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Um. well it gets more intense :D;;

PitchBlue89

Posted by PitchBlue89 4 years ago Report

Well I for one, am waiting with bated breath.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Don't worry, you didn't miss the chapter. I back-dated it, saving it in my queue to be uploaded at a later date since I'm out of town, and my iPad refuses to upload text files. I have to wait for an opportunity to seize the alternative computer.

saintheartwing

Posted by saintheartwing 4 years ago Report

I feel the need to bring this up because not a single other person who's ever commented on your work that I can think of ever. The entire series centers around somebody who is clearly and obviously a demon. Evidently things like demons, magic, all of that stuff is very real and very present in a modern day setting

Where exactly is God in this? Time and time again on the site and in popular fiction I see demons or the devil used in a story, but the author never ever brings up any kind of heavenly forces whatsoever. That doesn't exactly make a lot of sense. You can't have the devil without God. It would be like trying to make a Blues Brothers movie without Jake. It's missing one of the key components of its identity.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Oh. I just realized upon a second review, that you believe I have not made any mention of God Of The Bible (in any form) in any capacity. This is not true. In my canonical series (Little Pill is a spin-off, but still holds true to the universe) religion is a very strong motif. In, fact the entirety of Glass Curtain is a protracted piece on religion and its subversion; and Nita is Judeo beliefs manifest.
There are even segments of Glass Curtain wherein I write passages in the facsimile of a biblical voice.

Little Pill hasn't addressed religion (yet) but it will because that is a running theme with Danny; but it won't be full-bore like in Revelations (Intimacy, Gypsy Blood, Glass Curtain, Devils Backbone)

Little Pill isn't supposed to be as nuanced or complex work (like my magnum opus) ; its a guilty pleasures piece.

saintheartwing

Posted by saintheartwing 4 years ago Report

I can understand subversion but it would be subversion of religion if both sides weren't what you expected them to be. Danny is EXACTLY how you expect a demon to be. It comes off more like blatantly ignoring commonalities of religion. There's not exactly any kind of Heavenly foil to Danny that manifests in your work.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

I agree, Danny is more type casted in Little Pill, due to its slattern nature. However, in the canon of the series there is - and will be - continued subversion of both sides. I can't go into detail otherwise I will spoil several important plot elements not yet revealed.

However, Danny is never meant to have a heavenly foil; he is his own foil. But Joanne is his antithesis, and Nita is his polar opposite (horrific over generalization)

What he is - in essence - is the subversion of the Heel Turn Trope; he has emotional complexity and he may even tempt the reader into believing he can change - but he doesn't. And that's the point. Specific to Little Pill, he is my narrative that you can't "save" or "change" your toxic boyfriend -- which is a persisting theme in this genre; and in Revelations, he won't find redemption (at least not the classical sense) because of plot mechanics, narrative purpose and character design. That, and he is irony manifest, that out of the entire ensemble, he is the most honest character in terms of self identity -- which, actually ends up being untrue as time persists because Nita (a God fearing woman) has him question his identity by virtue of being immune to his craft. And because he cannot subsume or consume her, he is forced to face his greatest fear: himself, Godless

saintheartwing

Posted by saintheartwing 4 years ago Report

That's surprisingly deep.

But I have to admit, it's really kind of hard for me to read your work much in the same way it's hard for me to read through "1984" and the scene in which our protagonist is getting tortured. You just feel angry and sick to your stomach, and you want to HURT this man but can't, and it makes you feel even worse.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Mhm. I understand. However, because this is my intent, I am pleased that this is your response; it is a visceral one, which is something that I seek to invoke.

I feel that, as an author (any author), if you have that one character in your ensemble that causes the reader to gnash their teeth, that This Is A Good Thing.

Whether you respond positively, or negatively -- you are /responding/, which means you are experiencing an emotional response. This is something any writer wants to hear. You are invested.

From my experience people hate to love Danny, or love to hate him, which is deliberate on my part. He is the (charismatic) villain (without whom there would be no story; aka, no central plot conflict) but he is also a rather complex character in spite of this.

I don't respect writers that don't have the bravery required to actively portray a despicable (yet strangely likable) character. If you are going to do that, go whole-hog. Don't mention their exploits "off screen," don't gentle their anger or censor their behavior -- and worst of all, don't - for the love of God - have them "Lose" simply because they are the antagonist.

Daniel is also something of a reflection of the reader's shadow psyche. He is meant to arouse, to excite, to horrify, to fixate, to disgust. I have had people 'walk away' from certain chapters terrified of /their/ responses, either because of how they experienced a strangling need to /hurt/ a fictional character (since when were they capable of such feelings?), or that they were strangely aroused, simply for the reason it may have been told through his perspective, therefore the experience may have been beguilingly seductive. Or, they are stunned at how they are 'excited' over the prospect of a romantic interest, at which point they duly smack themselves, promptly reminding themselves that he's The Bad Guy, and this Is Bad.

I've had so many people over the last 4.5 years PM me with serious concerns, wondering if they're crazy because they like the character. lol. Seriously, you have no idea.

I made a bold move, I know, to have a villain as the main character -- but it is not often you see this, which is a shame, because this is something I am a fan of. (And would work stupendously in vore literature)

In writing Revelations (not so much Little Pill) my goal was to approach everything differently. The main character would be the villain; the supporting character, the protagonist -- and even then, the remainder of the cast would dance between flickers of white and black, casting gray morality over the story. And, most importantly, I wanted to approach the challenge - head on - of having a very vore-centric series that was as equally heavy with plot and character development, with a very compelling narrative that is obviously told from the heterosexual female gaze (me). I can't tell you how many women (and men) over the years have confessed that they think Danny is the hottest thing to surface in the M/F sphere since, like, ever. And have been obsessed with him for years.

And, granted, at times it feels as though the title of main character slides back and forth between Danny and Nita. That there is no main character; the mythology is the main character. And then there are times some of the other characters do some pretty upsetting things (Aisha, for example) that make people hate /her/ more than Danny! That one still baffles me.

I believe that when the story (or parts of it) are told through the villain's eyes, it creates a whole new story-telling experience; one that can leave a blissful scar.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Oh. I just realized upon a second review, that you believe I have not made any mention of God Of The Bible (in any form) in any capacity. This is not true. In my canonical series (Little Pill is a spin-off, but still holds true to the universe) religion is a very strong motif. In, fact the entirety of Glass Curtain is a protracted piece on religion and its subversion; and Nita is Judeo beliefs manifest.
There are even segments of Glass Curtain wherein I write passages in the facsimile of a biblical voice.

Little Pill hasn't addressed religion (yet) but it will because that is a running theme with Danny; but it won't be full-bore like in Revelations (Intimacy, Gypsy Blood, Glass Curtain, Devils Backbone)

Little Pill isn't supposed to be as nuanced or complex work (like my magnum opus) ; its a guilty pleasures piece.

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

http://aryion.com/g4/view/224951
Now you may properly critique me

Granted, it is the third installment in the saga, but it can be understood, and enjoyed, on its own. (Your beloved Danny is at the heart of the tale; just like Little Pill)

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Banquet and Tabula Rasa will be of most interest to you. Followed closely by Giants, Teardrop, and Church

ScrambleandClick

Posted by ScrambleandClick 4 years ago Report

Reaction to the thumbnail: Is that a cock? I swear that's a cock in the thumbnail.

//Anyway//, I definitely loved this chapter (especially for the part before the sex). Two of my favorite passages from this chapter include:

> But, the young, troubled boy emerged and looked out at her again, his eyes winking in worry. "But..." He took a heavy breath and continued in a small, quiet voice: "I knew. I knew what I wanted. What I needed. Whati 'lways wanted." His hand snatched out, grabbing her by the collar. (Heather didn't dare make a sound). "But I didn't wunna hurt anyone, Kitten. I didn't - I - but I was hungry dammit, and I was tired of goin' to bed every goddamn night, starving. Got tired of shit being shoved down my throat, up my ass, in my face. Got so tired of it. Moms stopped feeding me, stopped trying. Stopped caring. So I discovered little tricks on my own to keep me goin'. But nothin' of real sustenance." He paused, as though amused by his own pun.

> "I - I never wanted to hurt nobody, Heathuh. " His eyes flicked up. His face was impassable; unreadable. "But now," he breathed "Now I do. All the time." He smiled a sad smile at her. It felt like Danny again, but different somehow. More sincere. "Strong prey drive."

Which were right around the middle of the chapter.

And I need more drugged-up Danny. The feels need to spill everywhere with more passages like this. D:

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 4 years ago Report

Saph, you are far more qualified to answer the commentor up thread. Please feel free to educate them.

As for my quick canned response : my work is an introspective look into gray morality. Danny is demonic, yes, but it saddens me to realize that so many people have overlooked the etymology and trace origins of such a telling word. Demonic and evil are not mutually exclusive; rather, it is a terminology that implies autonomy from God rather than inherent evil.

Once I am finished with the main story (Revelations) I will be presenting my re envisioning of the antediluvian period; the next saga will be more religious but God Itself will not be an entity. Much like the other stories I have written, he will be an abstraction or a concept mentioned by the other characters. This practice will continue because I have no desire to write about or anthropomorphize God; omniscient entities are quite boring and make me gnash my teeth over deux ex machina

PitchBlue89

Posted by PitchBlue89 4 years ago Report

Well, Where do I start.
That was literally awesome, I am actually a tad literally awestruck.
I'd had a pretty decent picture of Danny in my head, 'had' being the operative word. Way to tear a guy open. Loved every moment.
You guys write a mean story, the ramping up of intensity in the last few chapters means this series is probably going to kill me .... I will die the way I want to. Reading awesome stories written by awesome people.

Great work guys.

StarBomber109

Posted by StarBomber109 3 years ago Report

This story is so intense! And very well done. The words are so pretty even in the hottest moment. Great work!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 3 years ago Report

Oh ho ho. It gets worse. Trust me. You haven't seen intense.

Darius1972

Posted by Darius1972 3 years ago Report

It's paragraphs like this:

Slowly, sensually she stuck out her tongue, revealing the pill. He watched, transfixed.

It sat on a bed of silk, as deeply purple as the dawn. With a flick, she retracted her tongue, allowing it to drag teasingly over her bottom lip before threading it back into her mouth. Her bottom jaw undulated, her tongue rolled – the pill glided across her defiant tongue, dragging against her silky uvula -- as she snapped her head back like a Goddess emerging from a timeless slumber --

that I treasure so much in your writing. I am in the room with Heather watching that pill pulled into her mouth on a delicate velvet carpet. Caressed by her hot oral surfaces before slipping inside her through that fleshy flap at the top of her esophagus.

I melt like that pill now melts in the molten pit of her stomach.

mojo-2131285

Posted by mojo-2131285 3 years ago Report

You stories are some of the most emotionally exhausting on the site. Any chance we'll see more?

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 3 years ago Report

I love your commentary. "Emotionally exhuasting." Love it.
Yes: You will see more.

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 3 years ago Report

You are very good at unpredictability :)

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 3 years ago Report

That last chapter, buttons & bitches, was very sexy. If i were danny I would have not hestitated to punish Heather though lol

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 3 years ago Report

Wow. This is the sexiest chapter yet. Forgive me if i self-insert into Danny's role. I love how he's punishing Heather.

mojo-2131285

Posted by mojo-2131285 2 years ago Report

Glad you're still here.

R_U_Snacksize

Posted by R_U_Snacksize 2 years ago Report

Your writing is amazing!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 1 year ago Report

Just now seeing this, thank you!

R_U_Snacksize

Posted by R_U_Snacksize 1 year ago Report

You are most welcome. You should know I love your work!

HMDVore

Posted by HMDVore 2 years ago Report

o.o

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 1 year ago Report

o.o

MementoMori

Posted by MementoMori 1 year ago Report

Your writing always blows me away! Good work! I think your chapters are worth waiting around for, and I don't sit down and read them until I'm sure I can give them my full attention because they really bring you into their own world. Just truly amazing writing!

nephilim

Posted by nephilim 1 year ago Report

Thank you :)