Posted by Graywolf18 6 years ago Report

Spoiler warning:

Out of all the fighters, I only saw 2 being able to beat Pebble... Grin was not one of them. And in such a fantastic one sided fashion... I'm speechless. (but pleased)

Totally unrelated to the match, fart jokes are my crux. You have felled me this day... I laughed right along side the audience. Grin needs hugs and booze. :(

Posted by MrQuarantine 6 years ago Report

With all due respect, I must say this is probably by far my least favorite chapter. While I am well aware I have expressed clear bias for Pebble in the past I feel there is more to my reasoning than simple favoritism. On a personal level I just didn't find much entertainment with the way this chapter went.


I understand the shock value aspect of the match that you were trying to capture with it being one sided and all, but to me it seemed to come off as a waste. I really dug Pebble as a character because she added some much needed seriousness and intensity that is honestly missing from a life and death tournament. That being said let me be clear that It's not so much that I dislike that she lost, It's more so in the fashion that it was done. Even if some character victories were more obvious than others, each fighter at least got to exhibit what they can do to a fair degree.


To me it just really sucks that arguably one of the most imposing characters with one of the best motivations was reduced to a charge, a tail whip, and an acid spit...Again I wouldn't be so disappointed if she had been able to display more of what she could do, I find myself to be a firm believer in strong impressions, not meaningless duration. Even if some these characters only get one opportunity to be written about as long as they fulfill their purpose in the story in a meaningful way, then their mission is complete. In this particular instance I just don't feel like that was accomplished.


Aside from how the outcome was done, I also found another reason this chapter to not be on the same level as your others is because of the pacing. This story seemed rather short in comparison which I wouldn't particularly have a problem with if a good portion of the fight wasn't dedicated to Grin summoning power, which Pebble just kinda let her do I might add.


Lastly I think probably the biggest issue I take away with this chapter is how it resulted in putting a competitor on a pedestal. No other character has been gifted such an easy victory to the point where it seemed like they didn't even have to try. I'm all for building a character up as being a threat through match dominance, especially if they are the main antagonist or something, but this seemed rather extreme. To be fair I don't know what your plan is for Grin in regards to the rest of the tourny but if dice randomly decide who wins matches and she loses in the next round then all that stems from Grin's overwhelming victory and Pebble's waste is just another fight. This in turn brings me back to my issue of why bother writing Grin the way you did when it could essentially be pointless when she might not even make it passed the next round?


Overall, this is just my opinion on the chapter as I feel since I often give praise when I find your stories enjoyable, that I should also do the same when I feel a chapter isn't as up to par. With all this being said I will eagerly await the next exciting installment.