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Dimaria the Vore Maiden By Primal18

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Dimaria vore Brandish and Lucy upon discovering that they are a couple.

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venomousdreams

Posted by venomousdreams 1 month ago

Your writing lacks description. It's basically "She grabbed her. She ate her. She left. The end." Make the reader feel like they are there. There is so much more to it than the bare bones things you are writing.

Primal18

Posted by Primal18 1 month ago

Some of the stories I recently uploaded were some of the first ones I did when I started writing which is why they don’t have much description.

SwordkingX5

Posted by SwordkingX5 1 month ago

Nice idea but far to short on the execution.
I'd also have liked Brandish to shrink both Lucy and Dimaria swallow Lucy then put Dimaria in her panites