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This was an idea I had in my head for awhile that I was finally able to turn into a story.
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Posted by DarkPinkie 6 years ago Report
Well, very interesting premise. You could really use a lot of work on your writing. Though, Arya makes the best dragon waste.
I will be brutally honest here but it is quite a confusing mess. Jumbled sentences, and a million miles an hour pacing. Nothing practice won't help with I'm sure.
Posted by Primal18 6 years ago Report
Thanks and I wanted to finish it quickly since I’ve been busy lately.
Posted by MMPluc 6 years ago Report
It was a bit fast... however I like it that Arya gets a bit of a 50/50 deserved end, and Eragon got to say I love you to Saphira, and hey, this time both get one another and they were not the prey ^^.
Posted by Primal18 6 years ago Report
Thanks and I wanted to finish it quickly since I’ve been busy lately.
Posted by dragonvenom 6 years ago Report
Nice work its a little quick paced but 7 out 10.
Posted by Primal18 6 years ago Report
Thanks and I wanted to finish it quickly since I’ve been busy lately.
Posted by dragonvenom 6 years ago Report
Ah that explains it