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Willow's trainer, Janiss, challenges Willow to a dangerous rescue mission, with the hope of bringing out the vicious hunter lurking inside.
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Posted by 747474 6 years ago Report
Great, so these girls have a built in radio, it's not like there's a proven hacker living as a glorified imaginary friend waiting for the opportunity to send a distress signal, or a way of repaying daisy.
Posted by dreamweevil 6 years ago Report
Treading lightly to avoid spoilers, but you're on the right trail.
Daisy's had a huge "failure of imagination". She' optimistic, believing most people are fundamentally good. 6.0 was "safe", from her standpoint, because even if some future "beast" captured you, it would all be in good fun: with 6.0 capabilities you could always experience life as, say, a bee-girl, then change yourself back whenever you saw fit.
Daisy never considered that someone might use her biological freedom to take away another's. In order to keep her colony functioning, the Queen strips the knowledge of 6.0 from her daughters: Daisy can't change herself back because she no longer knows how.
Daisy was so distressed when she was captured that she didn't think of Rob at all. That's fortunate: Alicia established a while back that if you consciously try to hide a thought from another woman while connected, you lead her directly to that memory. But, since Daisy had put Rob out of her mind at the moment, the Queen doesn't know of Rob's existence. His entire "soul" was swept up in the Queen's mental housecleaning and tucked away with many of Daisy's other memories.
Another clue's already out there: Daisy's memories were encrypted in blocks, each with a key. As she's progressing throuugh the ranks, she's being given keys that allow her body to change, to unlock new capabilities. Neither Willow nor the Queen know that Rob's entire soul is contained within one of those encrypted blocks. There's also some history of DNA-encoded memories getting unlocked along with sexual maturity.
The bee-girls internal radio is useless for getting a message to humans, but there's a clue lurking there too.
Posted by 747474 6 years ago Report
Your right, the distress signal would just BEE rediculous, but a sakijaarven polkka might be an idea...
Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report
Disappointing.
Amanda hasn't looked important previous to this point. And Janiss is the one who I'd rather see die after this.
Posted by dreamweevil 6 years ago Report
Amanda wasn't important until this point. She's just another bee-girl trainee ("Junior Hunter") whose inexperience got her into trouble. This chapter is where Willow and Amanda meet.
One point of the bee-girl story arc is that, even thrust into the role of a "vicious" bee-girl, each person's personality leaks through. Daisy is clever and tries to do her best at any challenge set in front of her. Janiss is a very wise teacher, who really cares for her "student" even though her technique makes it seem at times as though she doesn't.
Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report
The problem is that future chapters keep claiming that "Willow" and "Amanda" have been friends since their hatchling stages, when that clearly wasn't the case.
Posted by dreamweevil 6 years ago Report
Thanks for pointing that out... I've caught a few continuity problems like that and will be happy to fix it.
Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report
As written, it looks like the guy snapped from living in a warzone, and Janiss is training Willow for when that happens all the time in the future.
Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report
Oh, and:
"If you wanted us to leave you alone, you only ever had to ask," Janiss said.
It won't help.
While that's clearly an accident, it does fit the obvious assumption people in and out of the story are having about the beegirls.
Posted by dreamweevil 6 years ago Report
The story never quite explains this, but I'll tell you what I was thinking for the guy in this chapter.
He's a "1.0" human who, like too many (unfortunately), has some violent tendencies. Those tendencies have led to a very nasty breakup with a long-time (and also 1.0) girlfriend who, finally, has had enough of this guy.
Side note: In this world, when you find a woman who's so far refused all of the biology upgrades available to her, it's frequently because she's attached to some 1.0 guy who discourages her from taking any of those new-fangled "improvements".
When she threatens to leave him, he becomes more controlling, even violent. "Where are you going to go?" She runs out of the house in tears and spots the bee-girls scouting overhead, and taunts him: the bee-girls are so much nicer and more pleasant than he ever was! I should just go with them and be free of you forever!
At first it's just a bluff, but, standing in tears in her nightgown in the front yard, she notices that he won't come outside. He's noticed the bee-girls too and is afraid of them? He's actually afraid of something?
She uses that to her advantage, twirling in her new-found freedom as the bee-girl scouts decipher the situation from above. He takes a few tentative steps outside and she teases him back: "Look out, they're gonna get you!" Sure enough, he goes back into the safety of the house: something fundamental about the bee-girls, their coloring, their sound, frightens him out of his wits.
When the bee-girls finally do arrive, the guy dashes inside, and isn't there to see them carry his ex-girlfriend off (presumably, she goes willingly).
He fumes over this for days, stewing in his own anger until he gets the terrible, suicidal idea of ambushing the bee-girls the way he does.