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A couple and a group of friends help solve an issue that the couple has experienced...
Whew. Lotta crap went down in RL so I'm sorry this story took so long to get out.
And yes, this was the result of the Thread I put up on my blog.
Lots of people voted! Approximately 33 of you did! I'm so honored to have so many fans...
And before anyone complains about the roles of the species, I literally put them all on a 'spinner wheel' and had lady luck decide who would be the predator and who would be the prey.
7 species overall.
I do apologize for the wait. As I said RL Bit me in the backside... and I may have to find a new home soon. >.<;
But in any case! I Was in an 'artistic slump' due to stress and problems at home, but I continued on! I finished this story, at last...
And now it's here for all of you to enjoy!!
Feel free to comment! Feel free to give criticism. I'll take it to heart and learn from it.
Also feel free to suggest tags if I miss any. In the past I missed out on "Species" tags and I realized "THAT'S WHY NOBODY'S SEEING MY WORK!!" So yes, please speak up if I might have missed a tag or if you want to see a tag added.
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Posted by GingerSnaps 6 years ago Report
I mean this in the nicest way possible, but like you need to work on working in character descriptions. like "a very busty anthro cow of white fur and black splotches, one around an eye giving her the appearance of a 'black eye'" all in one run on sentence is so jarring. It feels like your'e pausing the story to fill me in on their appearances.
Posted by Ryan-Drakel 6 years ago Report
Yeah you're right. Looking back at it, I did kinda make it a run-on... Gotta work on that myself.
For the record, how would you suggest doing it?
Posted by GingerSnaps 6 years ago Report
Id prob work the description into the character's actions? Like let the character's dialog n what they doing tell the audience what they look like.
For example instead of telling the reader that her spot makes it look like she has a black eye, id have another character go like "yo your eye ok?" n she'd go "oh no lol is one of my spots"
or like what you did with the horned woman's wings since like other body parts can move while peeps are doing stuff
but im still learning how to write myself so i might be talking complete bs so do with this what you will
Posted by Ryan-Drakel 6 years ago Report
Hey. Even BS has its uses at times. I'll definitely keep such things in mind for sure. Thanks for your notes.
Posted by GingerSnaps 6 years ago Report
Ya welcome!