Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report

I'd like to see Summer decide she needs to kill Eden and the lawyer from earlier, justifying it by saying that the company obviously didn't really care about helping the masses in the first place.

Posted by Barghest236 6 years ago Report

I still haven't decided who makes it to the end, but I love this idea! While I think Eden does honestly believe that the Institute is a net positive for humankind, it would be a lovely dramatic turn to have Summer freak out at the thought of rebuilding the facility elsewhere. Thanks for the idea!

Posted by MasterGryph 6 years ago Report

I don't know. Eden doesn't seem like she's being more honest with herself than Summer in this chapter.

Posted by Barghest236 6 years ago Report

I think you’re right — Eden seems very broken to me. She talks tough, but is clearly traumatized by her past. The Institute was founded to save her father, so she’s grateful on some level, but it also killed her brother, so she hates it too. Because her father disavowed the place — perhaps seen as an act of ingratitude and betrayal — and because her grandfather was simply growing old, there hasn’t been any real leadership at the Institute for some time, so the facility has been going downhill for years. And thus proud Eden has had to watch a place that she both loves and hates slowly rot away.

Yes, Eden is very likely lying to herself.

Posted by PrinnyDood 4 years ago Report

In light of your recent resolution to finish this project by Vore Day, I found myself reminded of this stellar series, and the fact I wasn't caught up on it.

So yeah: Great stuff! Love the dialog and interactions in this. Eden is a real character, and almost everything that comes out of her mouth is gold. I also rather like her motivation: too often in fiction 'blow up all the science' is the first and only response when a few voracious monsters get spawned as a side-effect. Her resolve to save the research, while still blowing up the institute, is a welcome change of pace.

You writing and pacing are, as always, incredibly good. Even though this was kind of an 'exposition chapter', it never felt slow or anything. Great stuff!

Posted by Barghest236 4 years ago Report

Thank you!

Eden is loads of fun to write. She has a solid backstory, logical motives, and a consistent personality — in fact she may be the most developed character I’ve ever created. Plus, I will always have a soft spot for characters that don’t hesitate to sling the snark.

From the beginning, Eden felt like a unifying thread in the story. She’s a force of nature who’s always there, carrying on her business even as innocent people meet their fates in the foreground. So when the decision came to blow stuff up, it felt so incredibly vital to have her on board. Once the backstory clicked, the rest of her motivation just kinda sorted itself. Why would she still be working at a place that pretty much ruined her family? Because she believes in the research. What would she do if the family cure factory looked to be going bankrupt? She’d salvage what research she could and leave. What if she learned that something evil was being done in her family’s name? Well, then she’d shut that shit down in the most conclusive way possible. I can’t think of it happening any other way.

Your feedback is, as always, tremendously appreciated. I’m very conscious of the fact that the vore becomes scarcer as the climax approaches, and so it’s gratifying to hear that the story doesn’t suffer too much as a result. Thanks again!