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Cool womb for a hot day! By Scarecrow1

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Its a heatwave in the greatest country on earth, So I felt like writing something related to it, my longest single written piece to date, so pardon any errors.

I'm trying more to write pieces directly in English, rather than translating them after writing

Really though, Ankara's really hot.

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Adseria

Posted by Adseria 4 months ago

You got the characters mixed up a couple of times (once immediately after Lydia entered the womb, and again just after the paragraph where she texts Emily). Otherwise, a great story. You're rapidly becoming one of my favourite writers on this site.

Scarecrow1

Posted by Scarecrow1 4 months ago

Will fix.

Thanks for the positive feedback, I'm mostly wanted to try a new writing format thats mildly smoother and more complicated to be easier to read.

I think my English is getting better and more fluid.

AndAnotherOne

Posted by AndAnotherOne 4 months ago

You sure this is an attempt to write in English without translating? This looks really fluent for a nontranslation. How long have you been learning English? Its not your primary language right? From what I've seen in this story, you write English better than any of my highschool classmates and we're all American.

Scarecrow1

Posted by Scarecrow1 4 months ago

I am fairly sure this was written in English over my native Turkish (Born & Work in Ankara).

My English is good as I work an office job at a factory so I have to communicate in English for 10 hours a day Monday to Saturday. But I've been speaking it since first education, about 16 odd years in total.

Thanks though, guess I'm doing better than I thought!