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Tags: Dragon Human Prey M/F Short Story
A short and simple first story. I'm certainly not a writer so any feedback is appreciated.
I am also aware that the formatting may be off so this submission is something of a trial for that.
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Posted by Nugget1138 5 years ago Report
Very nice, the dialogue gave the characters a lot of personality
Posted by Philosoraptor 5 years ago Report
Good writing and loved the dialogue but it all seemed a bit too cartoony to me. Having the dragon be a clothes-wearing 'anthro' really added nothing to the story and actually made it seem that much less believable unless Claire's many questions were all answered by Desmond's lifting her up to a porthole in his spaceship, revealing he was an alien being that took to giving himself a human name and his idea of 'eating out' was visiting earth and partaking in its humans and livestock. Still definitely a great first submission. I'm sure your dragon themed vore stories would also be appreciated on Furaffinity.