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Vitcent drew me an avatar to use around less lewd parts of the Internet, so I retaliated by telling the story of how their characters Umami and Nori first met. Among other things that Nori experienced for the first time.
Posted by noego 5 years ago Report
Excellent story as always. Thanks.
Posted by NightRoller 5 years ago Report
This story was awesome!!!!
As a writer, I would be fangirling over this if I was female. As it is, I can only fanboy, which is slightly less loud and excited.
The way you began this story is absolutely fantastic. Your writer's voice is quite liberal with puns and metaphors, and I absolutely love it! I also liked how you hinted at Umi being quite lovely without stating it flatly.
The one thing I could possibly think to complain about is the explicitness of the sex scene, but that's because I really prefer it to be glossed over or metaphorized, rather than portrayed in such descriptive detail.
Ah, well. I'm glad I saw this in my notifications and stopped by to take a look, because your writing is interesting from the very start. Seriously, you hooked me within the first few paragraphs.
Posted by EveAra 5 years ago Report
oooh its nice to see you guys collab! Cute story.
Love the way you wrote these characters, especially Umami, she definitely seems delightfully oddball and out of place in Nori's crapsack world!
Posted by Bitter 5 years ago Report
If it meets your approval, Eve, then I KNOW I got it right.