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A lot of plot stuff today. Some fun stuff at the end.
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Posted by Whereaminow27 5 years ago Report
Lauren is going to have to be more careful. Also Nadalia seems to be hiding something, since why else would a High Priestess suddenly depend solely on her above all else in the order to hunt something like the Grand Sorceress. Lauren is going to have to setp up her game if they plan to survive ^^
Posted by Restrogenic 5 years ago Report
Is Phamen supposed to be an alternate spelling of Famine? As in hunger?
Posted by VoidInVoid 5 years ago Report
Yes! I'm glad someone caught that.
Posted by Restrogenic 5 years ago Report
Awesome! I've been playing Darksiders recently and have the Four Horseman on the brain. It just sorta clicked
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
Is the high priestess crazy? Lauren a farmer what does she expect her to do? Fight with a pumpkin
Posted by VoidInVoid 5 years ago Report
Wow, it's been a while since someone's commented on this part. Always glad to see people reading these early parts. Giselle has her reasonings. They won't become apparent for a time, but she feels justified in sending out Lauren with Nadalia on the mission.
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
Lol i just got recommended to read this series by a friend who gave it high praise and i can see why you created a world where vore is a regular thing while leaving open the opportunity for a really in depth story not many people can make that
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
And this is coming from a guy who makes stories for a day job
Posted by VoidInVoid 5 years ago Report
You're living the dream then. I'd love to be paid to write.
I had the idea for this series a few years before I started posting. Couldn't quite figure out how to balance the characters, the vore stuff, and the plot at first. It's quite tricky. Different parts of the brain get excited about writing different things at different times.
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
Figureing out the plot is the hardest part after that you just have to ask yourself, if i was this charecter what would i be thinking? Try to take a ratio of when each character speaks and try to throw in some plot twists i honestly have my family to thank for my success as they help give me their thoughts and ideas on what i can add or edit from the story I'm really grateful for where i am right now thanks to them
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
Is the high priestess crazy? Lauren a farmer what does she expect her to do? Fight with a pumpkin
Posted by Dragonknight007 5 years ago Report
Is the high priestess crazy? Lauren a farmer what does she expect her to do? Fight with a pumpkin
Posted by rotta287 4 years ago Report
If Deluxe service doesn't at least prevent random people from taking you against your will I wouldn't call it "Deluxe" so much as "Criminally incompetent".
Posted by VoidInVoid 4 years ago Report
I am enjoying your comments, by the way. As you can see, it's been a while since anyone's discussed any of these early parts.
Posted by rotta287 4 years ago Report
Yeah I always start stories from the beginning and sometimes comment on parts as thoughts come to me.