Uploaded: 5 years ago
Views: 2,470
File size: 18.99 KiB
MIME Type: application/rtf
Comments: 7
Favorites: 11
This is a continuation of the storry around the man eating crocodile in my fake ancient mediterranean setting. In this one she conquers one last challenging foe before just going on eating people until the day she dies.
Part 1: https://aryion.com/g4/view/501415#item-itself
Like the last one this was written on crappy software while on vacation, so typos galore (sorry)
Other than that I hope you enjoy your read and please feel free to give me some feedback on it^^
Please login to post a comment.
Posted by iasiney 4 years ago Report
Neat legacy on the crocodile. I like how you describe the waiting stomach ^_^
Posted by Fischie 4 years ago Report
Thanks. That is one of my favourite parts.
Posted by JoelasTi 1 day ago Report
I'm increibly late and I loved this female crocodile feeding rampage. Please do more!
Posted by Fischie 1 day ago Report
Thank you^^ I am not sure when I will get to use her again. What parts did you like? Maybe I can recommend something that ticks the same boxes.
Posted by JoelasTi 14 hours ago Report
The way she saw everyone and anything as food. How you wrote the way her stomach was waiting for food and the prey's feelings when they were or while they were being devoured. Also, the graphic digestion scenes. You're very good at this
Posted by Fischie 11 hours ago Report
Thank you :)
If you want a similar predator, my alligator Swampy could work.
Many of my shark/orca/dolphin/snake stories have vivid digestion scenes. They are a staple of my work and found in very many of my stories.
Posted by JoelasTi 8 hours ago Report
I'll take a look. Thank you ver much