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Another month another story. Unfortunately this story took a lot longer then i wanted it too. Hopefully it was worth the extra wait. Even if the writing doesn't take the longest i still like to spend a few days thinking up good ideas and parts that can be improved. I'm trying to become a more consistent writer but I want to try to ensure quality with my stories. I have some really good ideas for some stories that will be coming in the near future that i hope you guys will enjoy but for now just hopefully enjoy the story, i know the subject mater is kinda more gross then normal with all the hobos and stuff and i kinda got carried away. Anyways let me know if this was a bit to much and I'll try to tone it down in the next one. As well any other criticism. (Except with grammar, I do proof read my stories but i do it at like 11pm so i will miss some stuff. Hopefully a few grammatical errors won't ruin the story)
P.S. I don't hate hobos, and if your a hobo and are reading this (however unlikely that is) I'm sorry if i offend you or something.
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Posted by techtician 4 years ago Report
Wow 3 of my watches posted today its a good day on ekas
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
That is lucky. I'm glad you liked it.
Posted by ShinjiIkari 4 years ago Report
It's cute how you excuse yourself for hobos, farmers... <3
I loved her insults pre vore. Are you a fan of /r/whataweeb ?
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
I guess I'd be pretty safe to say there are no hobos, or farmers reading. next thing you know you'll see me apologizing to blind people or elderly.If anything i should apologize to the cops since there the ones who could throw me in jail... But in all seriousness I'm glad you enjoyed the pre vore insults as it's one of my favorite parts to right. Also I don't usually use reddit so that would be a no.
Posted by ShinjiIkari 4 years ago Report
Then I suggest heading over there and check it out. I am sure you will like it too. It is anime girls insulting you for being a disgusting perverted weeb.
Also, as an eldery blind person I feel very insulted that you think I could not read your stories. Blind eldery people like me enjoy your stories too! I let my 8 year old granddaughter read them out loud for me every night before I go to sleep. (She is a 1000 year old dragon reincarnation so that is ok)
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
Yep just wait until my story gets translated to brail, then i’ll have hell to pay. Also a bunch of degenerate redditers making fun of other degenerate redditers... sounds like a blast. But you do you:
Posted by FrostFire 4 years ago Report
This. Was awesome.
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
I'm glad you found it awesome.
Posted by 157and493 4 years ago Report
I have been meaning to say this for a while, but you have definitely become one of my two favorite vore writers on this site.
As always I enjoyed reading this story, it was very good,
the burps seemed a little weak in this one although that is just personal preference and does not have anything to do with the story’s quality.
Also, as an extra bit of information, the reason raccoons dunk their food in water is apparently because it helps them gather sensory information about the food through their paws.
Because as we all know scientific accuracies are the most important thing when it comes to humanoid raccoon girls swallowing people whole.
Great story.
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
I’m glad you consider me to be one of favourite writers, it really means alot to me. The continued support of you fans really helped me improve my confidence in my writing. I’m glad you liked the story. However, i’m unsure what you meant by the burps being weak. I tried to include them in ever sentence to illustrate like a really bloated pred. Do you mean i didn’t go into as much detail as i usually do or did just seem very quiet and underwhelming.
Also i didn’t know that about raccoons, i just assumed they just wanted to clean there good. Cool fact, you learn something new everyday.
Posted by 157and493 4 years ago Report
To explain myself about the burps being “weak,” what I meant is that you used only 3 letters like this: “URP” to alliterate the burp sounds... It is really just nitpicking, but in your previous stories you normally alliterate the burps with much more letters, like in this scene:
“*UUUURRRP* “Excuse me,” The foxgirl said meekly as she let out a loud unladylike belch. She swallowed a lot of air while gulping down the farmer and it had to come up sooner or later.”
There you used 8 letters to alliterate the burp sound and that made it seem a lot louder.
Honestly though, reading this comment made me realize I might be taking this too seriously.
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
Yeah i guess i usually make them more pronounced. Looking back i definitely could have improved that scene. I’ll keep that in mind for the next story.
Posted by Altimos 4 years ago Report
Pretty good. I did up a Raccoon Girl and hobo awhile ago, never posted it though. Plays out kind of the same thing, though it was raining and the hobo went into a dumpster to seek shelter, fell asleep. Raccoon Girl came along looking for food ate him while he slept in the dumpster. He awoke, she taunted him for being trash, more back and forth dialog, let's just say she was satisfied.
This was good though, nice back and forth... though I didn't suspected that she wouldn't find trash like this hobo tasty XD
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
Sounds like a pretty clever story, wish i thought of something like that. I’m glad you liked the story. Also i doubt anyone would find a yucky hobo tasty
Posted by xvx17 4 years ago Report
It arrived a little late but I could not leave without leaving my opinion. Good story, and about belching, I agree that it would be better as in your previous stories. Make them marked and not intermittent. It's just my opinion, and you write very well. I've been reading it for a long time and I see that it has improved. continue like this
Posted by BobTheWeeb8 4 years ago Report
Thank you for your criticism, I’ll try to make the burping more smooth and like previous stories. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and saying i improved means alot to me.
Posted by NonamE1 2 years ago Report
Really nice story. All your works are just wonderful. I hope you'll come back one day