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This starts as more of a sex story, but it does end in vore.
I think this is my first story that doesn't have any fatalities at all.
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Posted by Turbak 4 years ago Report
Picture?
Posted by yetAgain 4 years ago Report
Of course, sorry I meant to link this in the description: https://i.redd.it/gcqvi4s7a9641.jpg (it's u/liu-xing)
Posted by ToweringValkyrie 4 years ago Report
I loved it. Non fatal was a surprise but I never complain about a happy ending
Posted by yetAgain 4 years ago Report
Thank you! I was considering making it fatal, but in the end I just couldn't. Amanda was too cute to kill.
Posted by Groblek 4 years ago Report
Fun! And I’m glad you made it non-fatal, because Helen’s a pretty awful character here with the way she treats their “open” relationship, so having her win in a ‘final’ manner wouldn’t have sat well with me. Honestly, I was hoping that Amanda would turn out to have unknown UB abilities and teach Helen a lesson in the inevitable confrontation between them.
Posted by yetAgain 4 years ago Report
Yeah I agree, Helen turned out even worse than I originally intended. And I like that idea! I'm also content with the way it stands because it's consistent with Amanda being a huge sub, but it would've been nice if she had put Helen in her place.
Posted by Groblek 4 years ago Report
Yeah, it does work pretty well as is. If you hadn’t had Helen expelled and transferred at the end, I’d suggest that for a sequel. As it stands, I think the two of them need to find a kinder dominant pred to show them what a functional open/poly relationship can be like.