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'Mai was making a high keening sound now, her body seemingly no longer able to vocalize any other testimony to her demise. There was a sound of tearing fabric, perhaps a stretch of skin, followed by the gurgle of wet flesh and collapsing ribs. Azula found herself placing a hand instinctively over her mouth for the first time in her life.'
Please comment - this is my largest and most involved work and I'm eager for feedback.
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Posted by Bigtimmy 3 years ago Report
Looking forward to the next one, its quite impressive writing..
Posted by Bigtimmy 3 years ago Report
The only thing I'd say as a suggestion is to make the hard vore more visual
Posted by Narrows 3 years ago Report
Gotcha - later chapters have some pretty messy deaths, so stay tuned! Thanks for the feedback!
Posted by Bigtimmy 3 years ago Report
Good to hear, good stuff... and good writing either way.