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An office worker discovers that the only way to avoid becoming his co-worker's snack is to fight for a promotion.
I came up with two potential endings pretty early into this story's conception and decided both were too fun not to write. Which do you prefer?
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Posted by Godeater 3 years ago Report
Good story i like how both versions were made i would have loved to see a third where Erika tormented mark by eating Sasha to hammer home his nearing end.
Still great job.
Posted by Straxacore 3 years ago Report
Very hot ;) I liked Sasha being pred more.
Posted by Destroyah23 3 years ago Report
Definitely liked the second ending the most. It’s really satisfying to know when prey get away victorious from a predator. There are very few stories that follow that and I think there should definitely be more!
Posted by viral31 3 years ago Report
Nice story, loved the teasing and tension. I liked 1st ending best.
Posted by BardicLasher 3 years ago Report
Second ending is definitely better. Not just because I prefer female prey, but because the narrative really doesn't do or mean anything if Erika wins. Without a turn, there's no 'story', just a series of events.
Posted by MrQuarantine 3 years ago Report
Though I'm more of a fan of antagonist predators winning, I think narrative wise the second one fits better. It didn't feel like much of a turn of events if Erika won so easily, there's no conflict in it. By Mark winning and sasha becoming the pred it better compliments the sasha moments of the story by elevating her character instead of just making her seem like a witness to everything happening.