Posted by TheSoulessGem 3 years ago Report

Fantastic, first as well.

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Glad you like it so much :3 Thank you for beta reading!

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Posted by FDdragon 3 years ago Report

Damn. What a great story. I'm more and more hyped up for the full interactive...

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

That’s so sweet of you to say! Connie wants me to ask if you taste just as sweet as your words~

What did you like in particular? :D What should I emphasize when writing similar stories?

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Posted by FDdragon 3 years ago Report

Keep doing what you are doing right now honestly. Everything needs balance.

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Posted by MarkusFreeman320 3 years ago Report

I know I say this every time you write an especially hawt story, but this is the hawtest story you've written yet! :3

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

As always, this is the highest praise to hear :3

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Posted by AFox196 3 years ago Report

Great job! I really love how this story came out

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you!! I love how your shading adds to the art, and I can't wait to see your take on the other two art pieces here :3

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Posted by techtician 3 years ago Report

Wow this one just hit everything and actually made me feel a bit. Really good job. Also reminding me I have a thing for Raccoons...

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you :3 Raccoons are hawtttt <3

And I'm glad this pressed the right buttons for you~ What specific aspects were pleasing for you?

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Posted by techtician 3 years ago Report

Well there was the previously mentioned raccoon but the disposal, POV as prey (I'm rarely in a prey mood but this did it), the detailing was amazing, the story got me invested in the characters, the disposal and sex bits were great! In general just an awesome job.

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you, I'm very pleased that I got you into the prey POV :3

Have you read the other stuff I've published in this universe? Especially the Ashley scene (https://aryion.com/g4/view/608263), which I think might push a lot of the same buttons~

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Posted by techtician 3 years ago Report

I'm not sure if I've read that one but I do know the jackal ones and the fox one in the bar really got me too. Such good writing.

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you! The jackal ones are some of my favorites as well -- Bella is a really fun character to write -- and I'll be writing more fox vore soon! Vicky's older scenes need a rewrite :)

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Posted by Nikkidafox 3 years ago Report

I love it. Kind preds are something that just makes me melt, and it's unfortunately not very present in this universe. It's great to see one.

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Kind preds aren't very present in this universe? I've gotta fix that ASAP! ;) I'm glad you liked it though!

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Posted by Pharo 3 years ago Report

For some reason, I imagine the coach sounding like Jane Lynch...

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Heh, I could see it~

Evelyn will show up in other scenes, don't worry!

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Posted by Yurinya1900 3 years ago Report

This story was amazing! I'd kill to be able to write like this, haha.

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you! What did you like about it?

I've only been doing any kind of fiction writing for maybe 18 months, the only way to learn to write like this is practice :)

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Posted by Yurinya1900 3 years ago Report

What I liked about it.. That's a tough question, If I had to say it was that it felt properly sorted in how the actions, characters, and wording was used, Whenever I try writing I feel I use the same words over and over again and end up being not as descriptive as I should when necessary.
I've tried writing by turning RP logs with friends into stories, but I feel I never got those right either, I could really use any tips for a beginner if you've got any!

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Hmm. My first couple stories were adapted from RP logs, but even in the best case that rarely provides more than the dialog and direction for the story :) What I'd recommend is that at each "important" moment, you write down the various sensations that the "narrator" character is experiencing, and try to get the reader immersed by engaging all their senses in that moment. Moreover, it's important to show characterization at bit indirectly, by making your characters lovable/engaging through their relatable reactions to the situations :)

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Posted by Yurinya1900 3 years ago Report

Haha yeah, that's something I noticed where sometimes It's more dialogue than actions, It's weird how others are more 'direct' about their character which often just makes it Weird and a mood-killer.
Though I could try a lot of it, Many thanks!
Merry Christmas/Happy Holidays btw!

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

Thank you, Happy Christmas/Holidays to you as well!

I think that dialog is the verbal version of show-not-tell, it's (almost) alway better to come up with dialog which reveals your characters' personalities rather than summarizing or generalizing in prose -- as in, I'd rather write dialog which shows someone as sweet and gentle rather than say "she was a sweet, gentle raccoon".

When possible, that is -- I'm actually bad at dialog, I get a lot of help from  markusfreeman320 haha.

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Posted by MarkusFreeman320 3 years ago Report

He does, I studied smutty art at Nomshire University with a minor in smutty dialogue XD

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Posted by wolfSnack 3 years ago Report

I'm surprised you're still in one piece after studying there, you preyslut you.

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