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Slut Snack By kirche -- Report

Uploaded: 4 days ago

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Susan finds out that her boyfriend is shitty, but in the end she turns out to be shit.

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RexLou

Posted by RexLou 4 days ago Report

Definitely a very solid story in premise and execution. I really enjoyed the shifting power dynamics and how Henry was swallowed up just as much as Susan, forgetting his original intentions and eventually feeding his lady to the beast. Imagery was consistently good throughout with some really nice sensory details and adjectives. Overall a very good fic.

If I have any complaints it's that the tags are slightly misleading. Endosoma does not seem fitting when the story ends in fatal digestion and M/F doesn't quite work since it's Female Pred and Female Prey. Aside from the tags, though, this is a very good fic.

kirche

Posted by kirche 3 days ago Report

Thanks for the feedback. I'm kind of conflicted about the tags. One tag was meant for the vore half, and the other for the sex. I assume that voting will sort it out.

RexLou

Posted by RexLou 3 days ago Report

I understand that. For me it was just slightly confusing since I usually associate those tags with the vore section of a story and often base whether I read a fic or not off of that. Other tags like “straight sex” might fulfill the same purpose of M/F for that part of the fic.

TETRO

Posted by TETRO 1 day ago Report

Damn! That was sexy! You really managed the tension well. You never knew exactly what was going to happen.

This might sound strange, but I think it's also good that you didn't described the characters too much. In normal fiction, it's often good to describe your characters with a details that imply a lot about their backgrounds. But in erotic fiction, you want to leave some gaps for your reader's imagination to fill in. It's a lot like writing horror actually.