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Eric II: Weekend at Eric's (SCAT) By GayPred -- Report

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Eric's stomach begins to rumble on his walk to work, who should he bring home as 'company'?

Warning: Story contains disposal/scat below the line.

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GayPred

Posted by GayPred 10 days ago Report

Hey everyone!
Thanks for the read!

Im curious if anyone has any comments or critiques? Im looking to get better at ny wtiting, so i wanna know what should be improved!

Sum1

Posted by Sum1 10 days ago Report

This is great! I especially like how you write digestion and disposal, and I have a feeling Brayden will be making a comeback :D

If I had one criticism to make, it'd be related to the formatting. Namely, your use of paragraph indentation is a bit inconsistent, sometimes there's a few spaces, sometimes more, and other times none at all. This doesn't affect the readibility much (or at all, even), since extra spacing between parts of the story helps a lot and is something I wish more people would use, but it's something I noticed. I'd suggest using the same indentation in every paragraph, but it's a matter of preference.

GayPred

Posted by GayPred 10 days ago Report

Thanks!
Im glad you liked it and thanks for the criticism! I will try to improve that for my next story!