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A Proper Unison (Nanoha) By No-One -- Report

Reinforce Zwei is feeling incredibly hungry, and nothing she eats seems to make it stop. What will happen when she follows a delicious smell to its unexpected source?

This story was actually inspired by this piece of art that I ran across yesterday: https://aryion.com/g4/view/633630

I should note that I very deliberately said "inspired by" not "based on" and especially not "tells the story of." Seeing the picture gave me the idea for the story, which I wrote on my own. I can't tell the story of that picture, because it's not my picture.

Anyway. It made me think of something I wanted to see, so I spent all night writing this story.

Please comment and let me know what you think!

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CrimsonShadow

Posted by CrimsonShadow 1 day ago Report

Nice. Glad I could be an inspiration. Looks like Nanoha's next, huh? I guess Fate after that, since she's rarely too far behind Nanoha? Oh, and then of course Vivio will need to return "home" to her mamas.
Anyways, really good story overall, thanks for sharing it with me.

No-One

Posted by No-One 1 day ago Report

I'm not going to promise that I'll write a story for any further scenes (it all depends on inspiration), but that seems like how it would go. I'm imagining Rein becoming a more effective predator with each "piece of meat" that she eats, able to swallow and digest them faster and faster.

Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

CrimsonShadow

Posted by CrimsonShadow 1 day ago Report

Well, if you want more inspiration, I do have an idea for how the sequel could go differently from the first, though it'll probably be a faster escalation than you were thinking.
(I'm kinda tempted to ask for permission to write it myself, but every time I tell myself that I'm going to write something, I end up not doing it.)

No-One

Posted by No-One 1 day ago Report

If you want to try writing a story inspired by this one, it's fine by me. I won't necessarily consider it the "canon" sequel to this story, but just as I get inspiration from other people's art and stories, I think its fine for people to get inspiration from mine.

CrimsonShadow

Posted by CrimsonShadow 1 day ago Report

So does that mean if I do write my own, could I use your story as a jumping off point? Like beginning with Nanoha entering the bathing area. (I probably won't write it since I never seem to be able to just sit down and write things anymore, but just hypothetically)

No-One

Posted by No-One 1 day ago Report

Yep, I'm fine with that. :)

I definitely sympathize with finding it hard to sit down and write. It takes some effort for me to push myself to start each of my stories, and then actually writing them takes SO MUCH TIME! This story, for instance, took me about four hours to write. That's a big time commitment for something that you can read through in just a few minutes.

Anyway, if you do manage to write your own story that follows up on this one, let me know. I'd be happy to read it. :)

CrimsonShadow

Posted by CrimsonShadow 1 day ago Report

Well, I’ve actually written an outline for what I want to do, which I rarely did even when I was writing. Hopefully that could help me if I decide to do it for real. Basic idea is that Fate and Vivio are close behind Nanoha, with Nanoha going in first to make sure nobody will notice them sneaking Vivio in. Then Rein has to try separating the three to pick them off one at a time. (I just really wanna have the whole Takamachi family in a stomach together). Big question is if I should do loli Vivio or adult Vivio. I’m thinking loli, partly so that Rein can have an appetizer and partly since Aryion does allow that stuff in writing so might as well take advantage of it, but I’m open to giving Rein nothing but full-sized meals.

No-One

Posted by No-One 1 day ago Report

I would go with loli Vivio, personally. The time line in fanfiction is always fluid, but Riot Force Six was only in existance for the duration of StrikerS, getting disbanded a few months after the JS incident was resolved, so it makes the most sense for it to be six year old Vivio.

Of course, as I said, timelines can be fluid in fan works, so if you want her to be older you can do it that way too

CrimsonShadow

Posted by CrimsonShadow 1 day ago Report

So we’re in agreement (albeit for different reasons): loli Vivio it is. Good, Rein will only have to deal with two and a half times the meat as her first meal, instead of three times the meat, lol.

KDzee

Posted by KDzee 1 day ago Report

Nice, not nearly enough micro/macro and Nanoha stuff in general. Good work.

No-One

Posted by No-One 1 day ago Report

Thanks! And I agree on both counts. While my normal preference is same size, micro/macro stuff is definitely enjoyable.

And I really wish more people would create vore stuff for Nanoha. Apparently, based on a conversation in the comments on one of my other stories, it's considered "too old" for most authors/artists to care about. :(