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Michelle, stressed and overworked, has a homicidal plan for a rude customer involving her shrinking ring. Will this "Karen" get what she deserves?
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Posted by Umhuebr 3 years ago Report
I honestly have no words for how AMAZING this was! This is true narrative! What a twist, to see Michelle's plan backfire like that... I truly didn't expect it! And, wow, just, wow, that digestion sequence was perfect! This whole story was so well driven, well detailed, well executed... And dark, very dark and twisted, as vore should usually be! This is truly top notch stuff! Even if one were to face it as a, let's say, horror tale (instead of a vore tale), the narrative just makes it too good not to appreciate. Congratulations!
Posted by supernova 3 years ago Report
Thank you so much for this kind comment! I strive to improve my writing so this is really a confidence-boost!
Posted by Fania 3 years ago Report
Incredible; I absolutely love subversion of expectations. I enjoy justice porn too, but the universe isn't intrinsically just, and sometimes the villain wins, and I love the frustration of those stories. I also greatly enjoy vivid digestion scenes, so that's nice too.
Posted by supernova 3 years ago Report
Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Posted by Zwanzik 3 years ago Report
You have an excellent grasp of prose. There were a few lines I was particularly impressed by, but this is the one that stood out the most.
"Michelle pierced her inner veil into the
realm of insanity"
The descriptions of stress, the hospital room, the job, all swirled together into an oppressive tone that carried the story into the "twist" in a logical way. Of *course* it would backfire, just look at everything else Michelle had been dealing with. Some of my favorite vore has that sense of pre-determined dread, as if the protagonist is cursed, and this story carried that feeling well.
Also, and this might be a small thing, vore writing usually has the "swallow" take up a few sentences, I'm guilty of sparing a paragraph on it on occasion, so it was really fresh to have it portrayed with such violent suddenness.
Fantastic job!
Posted by supernova 3 years ago Report
Awww, you're making me blush! You are amazing! THANK YOU!