This is a great story any way you slice it. Original interactions, varied euphemisms, solid pacing and a good conclusion. I don't know why I didn't comment before, but I turned to you as an example when I wrote my stories.
I don't normally comment on stories or anything for that matter but the sheer quality of this story astounds me. I truly hope you write more just like this one because combining this story's quality with the lack of good unbirth stories tend to add up with this story easily being the pick of the litter.
Great story, kept my interest the whole way through. Adding a little more detail on the characters emotions rather then just physical stimuli wouldnt hurt but either way this was worth reading.
Please login to post a comment.
Posted by Shadow_Fox 20 years ago Report
Awsome story, hope to see more great work from you in the future
Posted by happyyoshi 17 years ago Report
wow that was amazing i loved every minute of it you have to do another one with linda
Posted by Squirelly 16 years ago Report
This is a great story any way you slice it. Original interactions, varied euphemisms, solid pacing and a good conclusion. I don't know why I didn't comment before, but I turned to you as an example when I wrote my stories.
Posted by Radijs 16 years ago Report
I feel honored that you think my stories are good enough to use as an example :)
I think that this is one of my better stories.
Posted by Quarren 15 years ago Report
I don't normally comment on stories or anything for that matter but the sheer quality of this story astounds me. I truly hope you write more just like this one because combining this story's quality with the lack of good unbirth stories tend to add up with this story easily being the pick of the litter.
Posted by Radijs 15 years ago Report
Thanks. This is one of the stories I spent most time on and really made an attempt to get it right.
Posted by TW 14 years ago Report
One of the first works I ever read by you. Still a classic.
Posted by DRayElliott 12 years ago Report
This story needs a sequel so that we know what happened to Tom and Linda. Did they regress? Progress? Change genders? What?
Posted by Radijs 12 years ago Report
I doubt I'll ever write a sequel. I never thought much about what would happen afterwards. I just wanted to put in an ending.
Posted by Drizztt44 11 years ago Report
Great story, kept my interest the whole way through. Adding a little more detail on the characters emotions rather then just physical stimuli wouldnt hurt but either way this was worth reading.
Posted by eternalshadow30 6 years ago Report
The story feels incomplete since the ending didnt talk about what happened after they got stuck.
Posted by Radijs 6 years ago Report
I don't know. I never thought of more.