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So, this is a request I got from Max123 and I wanted to see if I could try it out.
Anyways, I kind of freaked myself out on the possible outcome as it is often that the 'sister' is lost to the pred, but I played it in a different way.
Also, if you want a sequel, I ran on fumes to the night, so no, but I welcome any of you to try, if you want to.
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Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report
Interesting idea but there is bit of interpretation necessary for it to be conveyed.
Posted by PoserT 3 years ago Report
Makes sense, but like I said, was running on fumes and just did it, so yeah.
Thanks for the insight, though.
Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report
No problem, was definitely a more optimistic ending than most of the Max123 stuff
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
I really liked this one as the ending left me wanting more. ^^
If a sequel is made I hope is stays none harmful like this.
Would love to see what Iris does in her off time when not on the job. Perhaps a little playful entrapment with Monica?^^
Could really see her taking Monica in a sequel at the gym for some off work play, and Tosh flipping his lid thinking the worst. Would be cute to see Iris lead him on and tease him about his sister situation while she goes about her day.
"Don't worry Toshy.. You'll get her back but you gotta do some stuff for me before I consider it."
Posted by PoserT 3 years ago Report
Interesting idea, but I think about it some other time.
Still, a bit of playful teasing never really hurt anyone...
...right?
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
Nope. teasing doesn't hurt bit, once you know its teasing.^^
I thought the idea was a rather sound one considering the nature of Max123 stories.
Although the whole unhappy ending thing never sat well with me, I can not look past the fact that I loved the helplessness in the stories. It adds a realism to it that can't be beat.
Big, mysterious, and beautiful woman unbirths a loved one for pleasure or other reasons... Relative is left helpless as she pretends to be prego and just goes about her daily life. No one but the two of them knows the truth, and telling others about it for help is pointless because no one would believe it.
I LOVE this about Max123's stories!
The regression part however, always sat badly.
For me the real fun is in the entrapment. A hot woman unbirths a cuit hot girl for fun or some other kind of kinky motive. Afterwards a brother or sister finds out and becomes desperate to save her.
What I wanted most in the stories but never got was for it all to play out longer. I wanted escape and rescue attempts, I wanted the unbirther to tease and lead the relative around by the nose to get their loved one back. I wanted to see scenes where it wasn't all fun and games for the predator.
(Too much kicking, the trapped individual causing embarrassing or awkward moments in public like difficulty walking due to pleasure.)
I wanted internal points of view of the trapped girl and all she was experiencing while being carried around.
There was never enough of this stuff in the aftermath of the unbirth scenes for me.
Finally, at the end of the stories, I wanted there to be an understanding of some kind between everyone involved. Some sort of unfavorable compromise that more or less gave everyone what they wanted.
I rarely see this in stories anymore.
Posted by PoserT 3 years ago Report
That's a big insight, something I can't fully grasp at, but I understand your issue in the least bit.
Thanks for giving this much out, it adds depth to thoughts.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
Your welcome!^^
Always happy to give away ideas and concepts.
For instance...
In this story the woman is normal when she enters but is pregnant when she leaves....
I’ve been tinkering with a way to make things seam normal here because in real life this would raise many questions...
My solution to this is pre inflation!
Woman goes into a secluded room, like a changing area or bathroom, looking hugely pregnant form the start because she has water or air filling her up. Then, before or after the unbirth she lets it all out so that she stays the same size with her occupant.
Two women go in... one hugely pregnant and the other not...
Moments later the hugely pregnant one comes waddling out a bit winded and wincing as her babies are presumably acting up..
Meanwhile... the other girl never comes out.. she vanishes in the changing room leaving only her clothes behind.
Sort of seams more real and planed like this I think.