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This is the first vore story I've written, with two of my favorite characters from just about any game. I don't necessarily think it's worthy of being put out there, but it's a good enough reference of where I'm starting from. Any criticism is very much appreciated! I'm trying to get better and any help with that would be great.

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tonth1

Posted by tonth1 2 weeks ago Report

This has to be the first story i read without going into the gags first. Nicely done.

Kasra

Posted by Kasra 2 weeks ago Report

Really well done! I'm surprised it's only your first story!

SupervillainJoe

Posted by SupervillainJoe 7 days ago Report

Pretty good story! There were some times where the flow would be a little choppy, but I think that could be fixed with just some more proofreading. It definitely got much better around the vore section, which is what I enjoyed most anyways.