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Last Minute Packing By Cerise -- Report

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Hannah and Mara are looking forward to a relaxing summer getaway after a busy semester at college. When they get to the airport, however, they run into a problem: they packed three bags, but the airline only allows two carry-ons. Whatever shall they do?

I feel pretty good about how this one turned out, given that it's more dialogue driven than any of my other stories so far. Let me know what you think; I could definitely see myself doing more object vore in the future.

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WaterInRain

Posted by WaterInRain 1 year ago Report

Oh wow you write fantastic object vore!

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 1 year ago Report

I'm really glad to hear it! I had several object vore concepts sitting around in my ideas folder for a while, so I figured it was worth giving one of them a shot and I'm quite happy with the way it came out.

WaterInRain

Posted by WaterInRain 1 year ago Report

Love how you wrote about how her stomach reacted and the bit with the bikini swallowing was 10/10. Keep it up!

GeneralUrist

Posted by GeneralUrist 1 year ago Report

This has been some good object swallowing content, so I'm looking forwards to seeing more from you.

Restrogenic

Posted by Restrogenic 1 year ago Report

That was great, honestly can’t see how they didn’t expect to be caught by TSA if she swallowed coins and the charger lol

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 1 year ago Report

Haha well I suppose they didn't plan very far in advance. The TSA ending wasn't something I initially planned to include, but it felt like a nice little bonus with fun implications for what happens next. :)

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 1 year ago Report

This is AMAZING!!!! I absolutely love the way you wrote object vore! Although I can't help but think that the story here is about 10% of the way told :D

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 1 year ago Report

Thank you so much! I enjoyed writing this one quite a bit so I'll definitely be doing more with object vore in the future.

I get what you mean with the plot being only part way told though, especially with the TSA bit I threw in at the end. I've always held the post-vore content in your stories in high regard, but I don't know how well I could pull off that sort of thing myself.

Indighost

Posted by Indighost 1 year ago Report

Glad you are having fun with it ! :)

RocknRay

Posted by RocknRay 1 year ago Report

I like your writing. Since you asked for future story ideas, I do have one in mind if you would like to hear it.

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 1 year ago Report

Thank you! If you would like, feel free to PM me your idea. I can't promise anything (especially if it's a particular fandom or what have you that I'm not familiar with), but I'd be interested in hearing. :)

RocknRay

Posted by RocknRay 1 year ago Report

Sorry it took so long to reply. I appreciate your interest. So my story idea is unwilling M prey and F pred who is a doctor. The M patient sees the Dr for general practice. She realizes her patient has the compatible blood type for the experiments she wants to conduct with the shrinking machine she has access to. She uses false pretenses to get him in the machine and shrinks him down. She abducts him in the name of science and over time conducts experiments to determine the durability of his shrunken body. She keeps him in her mouth for predetermined periods of time. She swallows him and observes him in her stomach with orthoscopic camera with light. I don't know how it ends. Please be honest and let me know if this is a story you have interest in writing.
-Ray

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 1 year ago Report

I like the idea! It's hard to make dependable predictions about what I'm *actually* going to get around to writing (as evidenced by the lack of new content for the past month), so I don't want to commit to anything. I definitely like all the themes in the story, particularly the internal camera. That said, if you're looking for more certainty on a request or commission, you'll probably have better odds with a more consistent writer, since I tend to get behind on my own schedules.

anonymous19999

Posted by anonymous19999 1 year ago Report

love the pacing and escalation, the ending is funny

but i just cant help but read the object vore as like foreplay

SolarisBravo

Posted by SolarisBravo 9 months ago Report

Just might be the best object swallowing story I've ever read. Would be very interested in future stories on the subject.

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 9 months ago Report

I'm honored! <3

I definitely intend to write more like this with object vore down the line, though I've never been great at guessing how much time new stories will take. It will come though!

RandomCPUman

Posted by RandomCPUman 5 months ago Report

I loved this. This was probably one of the best-written object vore stories I've ever read- something that is, unfortunately, not entirely common. As I said the writing was wonderful, but it was also funny, sensual, and had me rooting for this plan working, so much so that I actually shouted in dismay at the ending. You, sir (or ma'am), know how to write an excellent story, and I hope to see more beautiful works of art in literary form from you in the future.

RandomCPUman

Posted by RandomCPUman 5 months ago Report

Also I'm totally following you.

RandomCPUman

Posted by RandomCPUman 5 months ago Report

Sorry, "Watching"... Been a while since I've watched someone, so I'm a bit rusty on the terminology.

Cerise

Posted by Cerise 5 months ago Report

Thank you - it really means a lot to hear that people enjoy my silly little vore stories. This one in particular seems to have found a niche, which I honestly didn't expect when I was writing it. I've actually seen it shared elsewhere outside of Eka's, which hasn't happened (as far as I know) with any of my other stories. Crazy how that happens.

Expect more object vore in the future - whenever I have a free time again. And thank you for the watch! <3