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Hannah and Mara are looking forward to a relaxing summer getaway after a busy semester at college. When they get to the airport, however, they run into a problem: they packed three bags, but the airline only allows two carry-ons. Whatever shall they do?
I feel pretty good about how this one turned out, given that it's more dialogue driven than any of my other stories so far. Let me know what you think; I could definitely see myself doing more object vore in the future.
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Posted by WaterInRain 3 years ago Report
Oh wow you write fantastic object vore!
Posted by Cerise 3 years ago Report
I'm really glad to hear it! I had several object vore concepts sitting around in my ideas folder for a while, so I figured it was worth giving one of them a shot and I'm quite happy with the way it came out.
Posted by WaterInRain 3 years ago Report
Love how you wrote about how her stomach reacted and the bit with the bikini swallowing was 10/10. Keep it up!
Posted by GeneralUrist 3 years ago Report
This has been some good object swallowing content, so I'm looking forwards to seeing more from you.
Posted by Restrogenic 3 years ago Report
That was great, honestly can’t see how they didn’t expect to be caught by TSA if she swallowed coins and the charger lol
Posted by Cerise 3 years ago Report
Haha well I suppose they didn't plan very far in advance. The TSA ending wasn't something I initially planned to include, but it felt like a nice little bonus with fun implications for what happens next. :)
Posted by Indighost 3 years ago Report
This is AMAZING!!!! I absolutely love the way you wrote object vore! Although I can't help but think that the story here is about 10% of the way told :D
Posted by Cerise 3 years ago Report
Thank you so much! I enjoyed writing this one quite a bit so I'll definitely be doing more with object vore in the future.
I get what you mean with the plot being only part way told though, especially with the TSA bit I threw in at the end. I've always held the post-vore content in your stories in high regard, but I don't know how well I could pull off that sort of thing myself.
Posted by Indighost 3 years ago Report
Glad you are having fun with it ! :)
Posted by RocknRay 3 years ago Report
I like your writing. Since you asked for future story ideas, I do have one in mind if you would like to hear it.
Posted by Cerise 3 years ago Report
Thank you! If you would like, feel free to PM me your idea. I can't promise anything (especially if it's a particular fandom or what have you that I'm not familiar with), but I'd be interested in hearing. :)
Posted by RocknRay 3 years ago Report
Sorry it took so long to reply. I appreciate your interest. So my story idea is unwilling M prey and F pred who is a doctor. The M patient sees the Dr for general practice. She realizes her patient has the compatible blood type for the experiments she wants to conduct with the shrinking machine she has access to. She uses false pretenses to get him in the machine and shrinks him down. She abducts him in the name of science and over time conducts experiments to determine the durability of his shrunken body. She keeps him in her mouth for predetermined periods of time. She swallows him and observes him in her stomach with orthoscopic camera with light. I don't know how it ends. Please be honest and let me know if this is a story you have interest in writing.
-Ray
Posted by Cerise 3 years ago Report
I like the idea! It's hard to make dependable predictions about what I'm *actually* going to get around to writing (as evidenced by the lack of new content for the past month), so I don't want to commit to anything. I definitely like all the themes in the story, particularly the internal camera. That said, if you're looking for more certainty on a request or commission, you'll probably have better odds with a more consistent writer, since I tend to get behind on my own schedules.
Posted by anonymous19999 3 years ago Report
love the pacing and escalation, the ending is funny
but i just cant help but read the object vore as like foreplay
Posted by SolarisBravo 2 years ago Report
Just might be the best object swallowing story I've ever read. Would be very interested in future stories on the subject.
Posted by Cerise 2 years ago Report
I'm honored! <3
I definitely intend to write more like this with object vore down the line, though I've never been great at guessing how much time new stories will take. It will come though!
Posted by RandomCPUman 2 years ago Report
I loved this. This was probably one of the best-written object vore stories I've ever read- something that is, unfortunately, not entirely common. As I said the writing was wonderful, but it was also funny, sensual, and had me rooting for this plan working, so much so that I actually shouted in dismay at the ending. You, sir (or ma'am), know how to write an excellent story, and I hope to see more beautiful works of art in literary form from you in the future.
Posted by RandomCPUman 2 years ago Report
Also I'm totally following you.
Posted by RandomCPUman 2 years ago Report
Sorry, "Watching"... Been a while since I've watched someone, so I'm a bit rusty on the terminology.
Posted by Cerise 2 years ago Report
Thank you - it really means a lot to hear that people enjoy my silly little vore stories. This one in particular seems to have found a niche, which I honestly didn't expect when I was writing it. I've actually seen it shared elsewhere outside of Eka's, which hasn't happened (as far as I know) with any of my other stories. Crazy how that happens.
Expect more object vore in the future - whenever I have a free time again. And thank you for the watch! <3
Posted by alittletrolling 9 months ago Report
I'm looking into writing object vore in the future, and this is a PRIME example. This is really talented writing, with the mental changes and bodily reactions being artfully done. Great stuff!
Posted by Cerise 9 months ago Report
I appreciate it! I'll keep an eye out for you in the future - more object vore content is always a positive. It's a fairly neglected tag, especially when you discount all the writing where it's just part of the lead up to something else. Hopefully I'll be able to get some new object vore writing out soon myself.
Posted by alittletrolling 9 months ago Report
Yeah! Right now I'm going to finish my own series, which just has the epilouge left, then I'm going to write one more regular vore story to expand the world my series is in, and then I'll write the object vore story I've had for a couple months now! I'd love to hear what you think!