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Here's something else I'm working on between commissions instead of the main series. I'll get back to this one over time, but for now, it's a standalone story. Also in present tense and first person, as I'm trying to branch out.
A normal day in the life of a lonely girl goes haywire when she finds herself under attack from someone who knows her a little too well. Will Brooke be able to escape, or is she destined to live on the hips of another woman?
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Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 3 years ago Report
Seems like our mystery abducter has been busy making kids out of others. But given we dont know what she looks like, this is just speculation
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
Maybe. But Brooke might also never get another chance to see her either.
Posted by threk 3 years ago Report
Loving it! The pred using a heating element to get their prey/pet to struggle properly is a really neat idea.
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
Thank you! I just remembered that you're not supposed to use that kind of stuff when you're pregnant as it could hurt the baby and thought it would be a fun little torture device for Brooke.
Posted by PhantomOfMars 3 years ago Report
Does anyone know of any similar stories? Or how to search for them myself? I avoid written work generally because it's so hard to tell where it will end up going and how.
This was a very fun read.
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
One of my biggest inspirations for this was Threk's detention and some older stories of Personad's that I can't remember the names of. Depending on what you found fun about it, I'd just look under those tags.
Posted by PhantomOfMars 3 years ago Report
Thanks! I'll try work out how to find those. I appreciate the reply.
Posted by LemonBarb 1 year ago Report
Honestly, read threks detention series. And before I even read, I love the intended path you have for this series, eventually being permanent entrapment. I'd assume?
Posted by Whatisaname 1 year ago Report
Ou yeah, not just permanent entrapment, but possibly turning her into a family heirloom of sorts.
Posted by LemonBarb 1 year ago Report
And by 'heirloom', you mean the "sapient family clit", passed on lineage, on all the family loves that are forever part of them, sort of lust/vibe?
Gotta love, sapient sex's. A sapient vagina/womb especially, more so.
Posted by Whatisaname 1 year ago Report
More like a family treasure that would be passed down from generation to generation. Kinda like what some people do with a ring or set of dishes.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
WHOOOO!!! GOLD STARS FOR THIS ONE!!!"
I want more!
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(NEW IDEA from reading this!!!)
NEW AS IN Something I have never seen or heard of in all my years on this sight!!!
What if she unbirths another girl for being nosey and the new addition is a closet UB fanatic who can't preform UB but is beyond turned on by the concept!
So In short, the new girl drives Brooke nuts with her sexual needy urges because she LOVES what has happened to her!
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
That's not a bad idea... I was debating giving Brooke a wombmate. Given what her long term plan is, more might not be a bad idea...
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
I'm really hoping to see a good ending much later on. Brooke stays herself and becomes part of the woman's family through a series of odd, perverse, and simi-upsetting events. Oh and I defiantly wanna see more tries at escape!
Something else I never get to see in stories is the predator struggling or having a problem after unbirthing someone. Like, their own body doesn't do as they want it to.
Perhaps something like an unknown time limit they can keep someone locked away. Or they have an accident that triggers their passengers birth.
I've wanted to see this kind of thing for some time now.
A woman unbirths someone unwilling, then sets about her normal everyday life all pregers. Everything is seemingly fine for a day or week until she suddenly feels her unhappy occupant coming out while she is some place public! ^^
Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report
I'm going to guess on a scale. In theory; it's akin to "long/lifeterm sex toy", internally. At least, before if going long term clausticphobia nightmare wise, Brooke might eventually, 'give out' in despair, until she stops thinking... And then, likely at best, hoped to be 'compressed/absorbed'?
Alternatively, ended up addicted to sex. "First name" basis as a luxery... And becomes maddened/brainwashed into being her exact, willing sex toy? Possibly, to the point of willingly pushing/helping her uterus absorb others?
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
I'm not 100% sure at the moment, but at least for a bit, Brooke is going to be trying to figure out the secret identity of her captor while slowly being drip fed information through the walls that seem to contract and expand at will.
Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report
I'm going to guess before odds of the captors children, being possibly past victims. One lens...
If a sequel comes out. On top of likely/possible 'cervix play' in her only 'escape' being completely sealed tight/shut 'eternally'. Wonder if you'd write a sequel, where Brooke steadily becomes more insane/mad in being trapped inside an unknown 'sack'/prison for eternity. Solidary Confinement wise? And what she'd react, if stuck with another 'surprise' womb mate, trapped forever?
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
I will say this though, her other children are not prior victims. They are biologically hers and her ex's kids.
Her Awakening is a bit different. More akin to Iz's unbirthing subvariant, but she has far more control over it.
Posted by Squiddicus 2 years ago Report
Oh, no, Brooke was shrunk! I was guessing there was some compression involved. Thing is, someone's gonna notice Brooke's gone, though. She'll probably end up just like Sybil, or worse. Hopefully, Janie will take pity on her. Or take in Brooke for herself, which isn't much better.
Also, the change of style on this one doesn't really stand out to me, one way or the other, but it does help the horror vibe that most of this series has. Or at least that's the vibe I expected for most of them. Just the Wind really set that tone.
Also, I may or may not have skipped this one the first time because I didn't realize it was part of the series. Whoops.
Posted by Whatisaname 2 years ago Report
No she just was already a small girl in a big, fancy home.
It just takes place in the same world. Brooke and crew are completely separate from the Iz and Prue storyline.
Posted by Squiddicus 2 years ago Report
At the start, she said she was under 5 feet, and then later said she was 3 and a half feet tall, outright saying she's shorter. That's where I got the idea from. Maybe she just *feels* smaller, and I just didn't get that impression.
Posted by Whatisaname 2 years ago Report
Sorry that's my fault, it's been a while since I looked at this one thoroughly.
Posted by Squiddicus 2 years ago Report
After writing two years of (mostly) continuous stories, I can't hold it against you for missing details here and there, especially since this one seems to be a one-off right now.