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Guess who's back?

This is a rather long one for me, but I like continuing this story, so here's a little branch-off.

I think I'll be back to uploading here semi-frequently, but I'm not 100% sure.

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LikesWeirdShit

Posted by LikesWeirdShit 4 months ago Report

I don't know how you do it. But again your story amazed me. And it's nice to see you back. Looking forward to any future stories.

MysticSummoner

Posted by MysticSummoner 4 months ago Report

Thank you!

GeneralUrist

Posted by GeneralUrist 4 months ago Report

Yay you're back! And seems Marine has fallen in with the Holovore ring already-- how deep does this rabbit hole go?!?

Anyways, this was a real comfy story. Shion and Aqua are so sweet together! And well, they do say safe vore is the ultimate hug :3 Seeing a couple gradually get close and discover a love for vore and each other is cute!

The "not that type of predator" joke got me laughing out loud! Though, imagine if a loli-lover like Matsuri <i>did</i> get their hand on these potions!

Couple bits of confusion regarding clothing though: "Shion then slipped off her pants" wait shion has pants? I thought all her outfits are a skirt + panties? Also, if Shion was worried about her clothes getting damaged by acid, why did she keep her underwear on?

MysticSummoner

Posted by MysticSummoner 4 months ago Report

For your questions:
1) It's meant to be implied that they aren't constantly wearing their streaming clothes so, in this case, Shion was wearing some sort of shirt and pants after the stream.
2) Shion saw Aqua was a little uncomfortable stripping down, so she decided to at least leave her underwear on since they might be uncomfortable if they were both nude.

GeneralUrist

Posted by GeneralUrist 4 months ago Report

1)Makes sense I guess.
2)Oh that is quite nice of her! Might have been better to make that more clear in the text though.

I Hope my criticism/comments don't come off as harsh.

MysticSummoner

Posted by MysticSummoner 4 months ago Report

It's fine. While I'm not trying to reach novelist levels of writing, some constructive criticism is welcome.

IGA

Posted by IGA 3 months ago Report

I love it! This is a cute great series you've got here!