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Little Lamia in the Big City (REDUX) is a crowd-funded series to rewrite an old vore story I had written back in 2010 about a chubby pink naga who has to learn to live in a modern city.

This chapter was funded by  Duskblade88.

If you want to contribute to this story, send at least $60 USD to http://PayPal.me/JerTheAce/. Remember to include a note in your payment that says your username and what you're paying for! Otherwise your payment won't count!

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Kira gets a glimpse at another side of Nexus before joining her friends at the restaurant.

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PrismaticAria

Posted by PrismaticAria 2 months ago Report

I love this. More world-building, more talk of Kira as a predator, and her thoughts about her somewhat predatory habits. Excellent description of setting, pacing, and character development. This is the kind of chapter that I'd pay for. Plenty of possible narrative branches to take from here, and I enjoy the anticipation of wanting to know what happens next, even if I don't enjoy the wait between chapters. I only fear that I won't enjoy what follows. Also, I hope we see Kira realize some latent power that never manifested before - that would make for a n even more fascinating story. Here's hoping.

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Allard-Liao

Posted by Allard-Liao 2 months ago Report

I read the entire old version of the story between this chapter and the previous one, and it's amazing to consider that Kira used to be almost solely a pred, considering what's happened to her here.

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Aces

Posted by Aces 2 months ago Report

I felt like Kira in the old story was just too flat of a character. Having a build up to being a pred was much more interesting to write.

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TheCrystalDemon

Posted by TheCrystalDemon 2 months ago Report

Honestly am curious about the old version. Don't think I ever located where you posted it

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RG9812

Posted by RG9812 2 months ago Report

Hey if some creep tried to touch my kid I pretty much do the same thing like ace

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Aces

Posted by Aces 2 months ago Report

Made an update to this chapter just now. In hindsight, the way Sharlene described the UK as a being racist toward nagas isn't only rude to the UK, but I had one British resident tell me it just doesn't feel that accurate to what their country is like today.

As they described it, "So long as you act British, no one really cares where you're from," and they made some historic references as to how the UK has been way more progressive on such issues due to their nature as a former world-spanning empire. I thus changed it to be more flattering toward the UK without changing my original intent of explaining how the USA reacts to having nagas.

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