I like how interconnected things are, as well as how often the Holomem's lore shows up in the foreground and background. Feels like a living world with so many details.
Seeing Calliope and Kiara quarrel like the old lovers they are and uncover their fetishes as Watame discovers what Kiara can do was real fun to read.
Though, one thing that seems weird to me is that Watame doesn't encounter anything else in Kiara's stomach. Id've thought she'd encounter some remaining bits of chicken in there, given what Kiara just ate.
Also at the end "so there was no reason to get comfortable in the reaper’s belly" Maybe should be "no reason to <i>not</i> get comfortable?"
Seems Calli handled eating better than Watame. Well, humans ARE omnivorous...
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
To answer your points:
-Watame didn't see anything else in there because whatever remained of that poor employee had already moved down to her bowels. I tried my best to convey this through all the descriptions of her stomach being "soft" at that point and the fact that it was shrinking through the beginning parts as whatever was left was being absorbed.
-For the second thing, yeah, that was just a mistake on my part.
-Yeah, Watame didn't really handle eating Marine very well since she's supposed to be an herbivore. Calli is a reaper as well, so it probably was easier for her than a typical human.
I love this story! I’m a big fan of TakaMori (these two are my hololive oshi) so getting a story where both of them get to enjoy some vore is just *chef’s kiss*
I’m such a big fan of this series, and I’d love to see some more spin offs (maybe a return to these two sharing a meal of each other and/or their genmates?) Keep up the great work!
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 2 years ago Report
I half expected kiara to jump in with Watame lol. You plan on doing anything with the new members?
Posted by MysticSummoner 2 years ago Report
Probably, I just want to give them some more time to fully develop their personalities.
Posted by GeneralUrist 2 years ago Report
I like how interconnected things are, as well as how often the Holomem's lore shows up in the foreground and background. Feels like a living world with so many details.
Seeing Calliope and Kiara quarrel like the old lovers they are and uncover their fetishes as Watame discovers what Kiara can do was real fun to read.
Though, one thing that seems weird to me is that Watame doesn't encounter anything else in Kiara's stomach. Id've thought she'd encounter some remaining bits of chicken in there, given what Kiara just ate.
Also at the end "so there was no reason to get comfortable in the reaper’s belly" Maybe should be "no reason to <i>not</i> get comfortable?"
Seems Calli handled eating better than Watame. Well, humans ARE omnivorous...
Posted by MysticSummoner 2 years ago Report
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
To answer your points:
-Watame didn't see anything else in there because whatever remained of that poor employee had already moved down to her bowels. I tried my best to convey this through all the descriptions of her stomach being "soft" at that point and the fact that it was shrinking through the beginning parts as whatever was left was being absorbed.
-For the second thing, yeah, that was just a mistake on my part.
-Yeah, Watame didn't really handle eating Marine very well since she's supposed to be an herbivore. Calli is a reaper as well, so it probably was easier for her than a typical human.
Posted by LikesWeirdShit 2 years ago Report
Wow. That was really good spicy story.
Posted by FireChicken88 2 years ago Report
I love this story! I’m a big fan of TakaMori (these two are my hololive oshi) so getting a story where both of them get to enjoy some vore is just *chef’s kiss*
I’m such a big fan of this series, and I’d love to see some more spin offs (maybe a return to these two sharing a meal of each other and/or their genmates?) Keep up the great work!
Posted by gwillikers 2 years ago Report
"A little spicy", huh? That story was spicier than KFP's Hot Wings!