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Where it all begins. Fairly long read detailing the cornerstone event in the lives of several private school students.
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Posted by Nalzindar 2 years ago Report
This is a story I have been waiting for a long time, and it was worth it :D
You have done an incredible job in building your world and giving your characters a background story. I thought Zelia to be some kind of important girl from the very start, but I always expected her to be eaten, so it was a big surprise when she came forth with herself! Nice done, I enjoyed this^^
The vore at the beginning of the story was a fine prelude, and I enjoyed very much that you came back to it at the end upon mentioning the two empty cheerleader shorts that was found inside the alien worm. What I especially liked (thought funny) was Kayla's complain about how the creature liked her butt so much, my imagination gave me a funny picture ;P
I sincerely hope you will write more about these girls again, they are fun to read about, and especially now as their background story has been told.
Posted by longwayofftiff 2 years ago Report
Thanks for reading and I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’m still finding little things that need editing some more, but it’s high time this was posted and enjoyed by others; I’ll need more inspiration to write more. I should be able to make some shorter stories soon.
Posted by PrinnyDood 2 years ago Report
Well, I finally settled down and gave this a read!
Great fun from start to finish! A really excellent 'origin story' type thing for your sexy monster-hunting ladies. As I suspect you know, I really love all the cool sci-fi stuff, too. This gives a far clearer picture of these characters than I've had before, too. My impressions of them were somewhat more vague when I was writing that 'weird science' story with them. I'll definitely be far better characterizing them next time I 'borrow' them for something.
The vore-tastic part at the very beginning was also wonderfully done, and helped set the stage for the creature's eventual return (as well as being extremely sexy).
I was also amused by the creature's apparent fixation on Kayla's booty. Space monsters do usually have good taste, it seems. XP
Great stuff all around, and I certainly hope to see more sometime! This is definitely also good for inspiration in terms of another colab-type-thingy, though who knows when I'll have time to focus on new projects like that again. xD
Posted by longwayofftiff 2 years ago Report
I’m so glad you enjoyed it! It took me a while to write this one, but I enjoyed creating it. There’s definitely more stories in the works! I’d love to see another collaboration!