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[Story] Best Friends Forever By NovemberNights -- Report

My first thing ever on this site. Please check the tags before reading, thank you!

Also I tried my best to describe the characters but honestly describing the designs of Neptunia characters makes my brain melt out of my ears. So here is some reference images:

Cave:
https://imgur.com/a/LZf9aLn

5pb:
https://imgur.com/a/q1mUz53

Thumbnail Image:
https://imgur.com/a/JhMIv0D

More stuff coming soon as well as a sequel to this. Thanks for reading!

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Oyashirofan

Posted by Oyashirofan 11 months ago Report

This was a nice read! Enjoyed the buildup and the swallowing process.

One thing though, if you are going to do visuals, just leave it as just the references pics in the description. The physical description I feel messed with pacing. Since it's an established series, you can generally be without describing the characters I think. (Since most readers would likely know the appearance of the characters.)

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

You are the very first comment I got on this site so thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed it!

Honestly I was debating on removing the character descriptions but decided at literally the last second to keep them in. I do think removing them would have been for the best though, I think I made the wrong call in keeping them. I’m just going to stick to reference pics from now on lol

Cruich

Posted by Cruich 11 months ago Report

No, do not leave out character descriptions. If you want people who *don't* know the characters or series to be able to enjoy it, too, establish everything like a normal story. Reference pictures don't cut it for a story.

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

You bring up some good points. If I was a good writer I would be able to put them in naturally without them feeling awkwardly placed, unfortunately for everyone I’m not lmao. I’ll probably just stick to reference images tbh

Cruich

Posted by Cruich 11 months ago Report

It'll shrink your audience, but it's your choice. It would be better if you just worked on putting it in naturally, as well as their personalities. Otherwise it'll just be blank-slate names for anyone who doesn't know them already, and will not be engaging.

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Damn...Rest In Peace my audience...

NoWayOut

Posted by NoWayOut 11 months ago Report

I'm alive motherfucker

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Hey bro I appreciate you man

IddlerItaler

Posted by IddlerItaler 11 months ago Report

For what it's worth I didn't mind the character descriptions. I thought they were a nice touch.

Also I find them difficult to write due to all the wardrobe-specific vocabulary you need to know so bravo for effort.

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Thank you I really appreciate the kind words! But yeah all the Neptunia characters have incredible & lovely designs but are a little tricky to describe. They do have great fashion though for real lol

Nyusha

Posted by Nyusha 11 months ago Report

Nice first story!

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Thank you very much!

HildaVGoneril

Posted by HildaVGoneril 11 months ago Report

Cool story! For a first go, it's really good. I hope you keep writing!

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Thank you! I appreciate it! I’ve definitely got more coming soon!

Redeyeddemon

Posted by Redeyeddemon 11 months ago Report

That. Was freaking awesome! Looking forward to the sequel!!!

NovemberNights

Posted by NovemberNights 11 months ago Report

Haha glad you liked it! Thanks for reading! I’ve got a lot more great stuff like this coming soon

Egads

Posted by Egads 11 months ago Report

Woo, another Neptunia vore story!

Trying124

Posted by Trying124 10 months ago Report

I have no idea what this is a fanfic of But I greatly enjoyed it!
Terrific descriptions Ofvthe digestion process. Hope to see more of your work soon!