Oh? How so? Did you want both girls to be digested? Or both to escape? In the latter case, like, I get it, that'd be the more wholesome ending... but then it also wouldn't be vore.
More like its too convenient with how long Natasha lasted, given that she followed Alysha within a minute (it seems). And for her to come off with just being naked, at that point its either they both die or none do.
Hmm, okay. Here's an alternate version, starting from a few paragraphs before the end:
"Very nice garden you have, sis," he says. "Alysha's handiwork?"
"GoddamnbastardshitNathanfuckyou... *yes*," she mumbles.
He laughs, and pats the side of his sack. "Do you mind if I water the plants? I can't see a hose, but I'll make do."
Natasha divines his intentions. "Don't you fucking *dare*! I'll kill you once I'm out of here!"
Another chuckle. "Who says you're coming out?"
Natasha freezes up. "But... Nathan, if you're about to ejaculate..."
"Hah! Do you think I've really got so little self-control? I'm not letting you go, sis. Two girls in one sack is a luxury."
What? Despite the signs, she hadn't expected that. Natasha had been into Nathan's penis before (when they'd lived together, he'd got into the habit of "prank"-swallowing her while she slept), but never this deep. She'd thought... God, it was embarrassing, but she'd thought she was *special*. Nathan fucked and creamed her girlfriends, while she and he shared an unbreakable bond. They might squabble, but she loved him.
Humiliating. He really was just a selfish man-whore. Natasha rages, beating against the walls of her prison, but only succeeds in coating herself in her brother's spunk. She can take solace in the fact that it's Alysha, in a way, who's digesting her -- Alysha this sticky sea of cum, which sinks into her body and breaks her apart. She thinks of Alysha as her limbs droop and her skin becomes slime -- is still thinking of her when her skull breaks and semen pours into her brain, which immediately dissolves into goop. Outside, Nathan smiles to himself.
"Tough luck, sis," he says. "You should've known this was coming." Stroking his ballsack and finding no hard outlines, he now tugs on his penis and after a few strong strokes ejaculates, spattering the grey-white remains of the girlfriends against their garden fence. Even so well-endowed a man as Nathan is not immune to post-ejaculatory depression, and he stares off into the distance as his penis goes limp. Flaccid, it still reaches to his knee. So Tash was gone, then? That was a problem. He'd come to the house meaning to seduce and devour Alysha, and he'd succeeded on both counts; but he hadn't expected Natasha to intervene. Sending her to rescue her girlfriend -- who'd begged to be digested, the slut, even if the bite of seminal acids had changed her mind -- had been a spur-of-the-moment decision, and even then he'd meant to eject her. Well, what's done was done. In a moment of mad horniness, he'd creamed his only sibling. They'd had exactly the same taste in women -- now how would he find willing prey?
Sighing, Nathan wipes his dripping cock down and folds it, best he can, into his shorts. "Guess this is my place now, Tash," he says to the stain on the fence. No answer. Nathan resolves to let the girls dry. He won't ever wash them off.
"Well, I'm going inside," he remarks. There will be other girls... and maybe, to make sure his sister's not lonely, he can start a tradition of spunking them against this same fence.
A droplet of semen falls from the general splatter and plops onto a leaf. Nathan smiles, taking it as a reply.
My hats off to you I was not expecting a whole ass alt ending. Kinda fleshes out the characters more, and upgrades it from sour to bittersweet. Plus, that post nut clarity bit was too real. Still, guess he really did have little self-control considering the outcome lol. Once more I applaud you.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 1 year ago Report
That was a pretty sour end. Kinda wish it ended differently but oh well.
Posted by Augustin 1 year ago Report
Oh? How so? Did you want both girls to be digested? Or both to escape? In the latter case, like, I get it, that'd be the more wholesome ending... but then it also wouldn't be vore.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 1 year ago Report
More like its too convenient with how long Natasha lasted, given that she followed Alysha within a minute (it seems). And for her to come off with just being naked, at that point its either they both die or none do.
Posted by Augustin 1 year ago Report
Hmm, okay. Here's an alternate version, starting from a few paragraphs before the end:
"Very nice garden you have, sis," he says. "Alysha's handiwork?"
"GoddamnbastardshitNathanfuckyou... *yes*," she mumbles.
He laughs, and pats the side of his sack. "Do you mind if I water the plants? I can't see a hose, but I'll make do."
Natasha divines his intentions. "Don't you fucking *dare*! I'll kill you once I'm out of here!"
Another chuckle. "Who says you're coming out?"
Natasha freezes up. "But... Nathan, if you're about to ejaculate..."
"Hah! Do you think I've really got so little self-control? I'm not letting you go, sis. Two girls in one sack is a luxury."
What? Despite the signs, she hadn't expected that. Natasha had been into Nathan's penis before (when they'd lived together, he'd got into the habit of "prank"-swallowing her while she slept), but never this deep. She'd thought... God, it was embarrassing, but she'd thought she was *special*. Nathan fucked and creamed her girlfriends, while she and he shared an unbreakable bond. They might squabble, but she loved him.
Humiliating. He really was just a selfish man-whore. Natasha rages, beating against the walls of her prison, but only succeeds in coating herself in her brother's spunk. She can take solace in the fact that it's Alysha, in a way, who's digesting her -- Alysha this sticky sea of cum, which sinks into her body and breaks her apart. She thinks of Alysha as her limbs droop and her skin becomes slime -- is still thinking of her when her skull breaks and semen pours into her brain, which immediately dissolves into goop. Outside, Nathan smiles to himself.
"Tough luck, sis," he says. "You should've known this was coming." Stroking his ballsack and finding no hard outlines, he now tugs on his penis and after a few strong strokes ejaculates, spattering the grey-white remains of the girlfriends against their garden fence. Even so well-endowed a man as Nathan is not immune to post-ejaculatory depression, and he stares off into the distance as his penis goes limp. Flaccid, it still reaches to his knee. So Tash was gone, then? That was a problem. He'd come to the house meaning to seduce and devour Alysha, and he'd succeeded on both counts; but he hadn't expected Natasha to intervene. Sending her to rescue her girlfriend -- who'd begged to be digested, the slut, even if the bite of seminal acids had changed her mind -- had been a spur-of-the-moment decision, and even then he'd meant to eject her. Well, what's done was done. In a moment of mad horniness, he'd creamed his only sibling. They'd had exactly the same taste in women -- now how would he find willing prey?
Sighing, Nathan wipes his dripping cock down and folds it, best he can, into his shorts. "Guess this is my place now, Tash," he says to the stain on the fence. No answer. Nathan resolves to let the girls dry. He won't ever wash them off.
"Well, I'm going inside," he remarks. There will be other girls... and maybe, to make sure his sister's not lonely, he can start a tradition of spunking them against this same fence.
A droplet of semen falls from the general splatter and plops onto a leaf. Nathan smiles, taking it as a reply.
"Yeah, love you too. See ya, Tash."
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 1 year ago Report
My hats off to you I was not expecting a whole ass alt ending. Kinda fleshes out the characters more, and upgrades it from sour to bittersweet. Plus, that post nut clarity bit was too real. Still, guess he really did have little self-control considering the outcome lol. Once more I applaud you.
Posted by ageofmyt 1 year ago Report
Damn, the story was good till the end, but the addition of this end was more than i expected.
Thanks for the alt ending!
Posted by crushxtreame 1 year ago Report
Why hast she kicked him in the nuts yet? It have gone for a worldcup worthy kick
Posted by crushxtreame 1 year ago Report
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