Britneys_meal
By Simrobert2001 -- Report
Britney Spears Unbirthing Christina Aguleria.
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Posted by Anonymous 19 years ago Report
That was shockingly badly-written. Learn paragraphs.
Posted by Simrobert2001 19 years ago Report
Thanks for the comment, i suppose. I would rather have constructive critism, but i'll take what i can get. to be honest, this is only my 2nd story, and has ALOT of room for improvement.
Posted by Squirelly 18 years ago Report
One thing that would make it a lot more readable:
Whenever the person talking changes, there should be a new paragraph.