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“60 Ft. Shortcut”

By RubbishWriter and Sekura


Dusk was falling. The leaves of the dark forest rustled slightly in the breeze. Not many people ventured through this particular forest anymore. It used to be a place of fun - families having picnics, children playing and going on scavenger hunts... but no longer. Ever since rumours of a giant snake making his home there, everyone had been too scared to come within 100 yards of the area. Well, everyone assumed they were rumours. Som

60ft shortcut

Uploaded: 18 years ago

Owner: RubbishWriter

Tags: Oral Vore Snake Soft Vore Digestion Unwilling WE

An obnoxious cheerleader takes a shortcut through a dodgy area... and has a sudden change of destination.
WE, soft snake vore, mild sexual content 

Salamand - 16 years ago

this is quite . . . . . . . . . . delicious, for lack of a better word heehee.

soldier148 - 17 years ago

generally good, you just need to work on your proportioning. for example, at one point you had the snake licking her breasts while at the same time it's lips were over her knees and later on her body made a bulge in it's body. the massive head needed to stretch that far over her body would need an equally massive body and swollowing the girl wouldnt create a bulge in a body that massive, being longer than 60ft. just little things like that you need to work on, otherwise great ^^

prisoner - 18 years ago

A very nice RP. You two make those characters incredibly believable, I'm impressed! Skillfull use of adjectives where appropriate. I'm sure you two were enjoying that RP almost as much as I was. ^_^ Thankies for a few nice images.

KavenBach - 18 years ago

Hmm! Not bad, not bad. I always enjoy the "too stupid to know better" ladies in vore... and I've always loved snakes as preds. Lessee... comments? Well, just one that comes to mind... this was an RP between you two, right? Occasionally the narrative tense changes from past to present (She "squirms" instead of "squirmed," basically). Other than that, nothing caught my attention. The grammar and spelling is excellent. Maybe a little more descriptiveness? Dunno, but that's my own weakness. Myself I like the description as it is. Oh... and I like the title. 8-)